Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise by avoiding redundancy and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and clarify the time frames more clearly.

例: I recently started a diet routine, so I usually eat snacks around 11 a.m. and also between lunch and dinner. This schedule helps me manage my hunger throughout the day.

提案: Improve your answer by using more formal vocabulary and linking words to make your response coherent. Avoid informal phrases like "gonna" and provide specific examples to support your opinion.

例: I believe the healthiness of snacks depends on their type. For instance, eating fast food snacks is unhealthy, whereas consuming fruits as snacks provides essential nutrients and benefits the body.

提案: Focus on correct grammar and sentence structure to make your answer clearer. Use linking words to connect ideas and be more specific about your preferences in the past.

例: Yes, my mom often prepared healthy snacks for me, like celery and carrots. She would cut the carrots into pieces, and I really enjoyed eating them when I was young.

提案: Make your answer more natural by correcting grammar and avoiding repetition. Use linking words to explain why you like these snacks and add more specific details.

例: Currently, I prefer eating peanut butter with bananas on a slice of toast because it's both delicious and nutritious. I could happily eat this combination every day for the rest of my life.

× Actually I got a diet routine recently and I have to eat snacks between 11:00 in the morning and between time of after lunch and before dinner.

✓ Actually I have got a diet routine recently and I have to eat snacks between 11:00 in the morning and the time after lunch and before dinner.

The phrase 'I got' is past tense but 'recently' suggests a present perfect tense is more appropriate to indicate a recent action with present relevance. Also, 'between time of after lunch and before dinner' is awkward; it should be 'the time after lunch and before dinner' for clarity.

× Yes, my mom always make me some snacks, some healthy snacks such as celeries and carrots and she cuts the carrots and gave me to eat them and it was very favorite snacks for me when I was young.

✓ Yes, my mom always made me some snacks, some healthy snacks such as celery and carrots, and she cut the carrots and gave them to me to eat, and they were my very favorite snacks when I was young.

The verb 'make' should be in past tense 'made' to agree with 'always' in past context. 'Celeries' is incorrect; 'celery' is uncountable and does not have a plural form. 'Gave me to eat them' is awkward; it should be 'gave them to me to eat'. Also, 'it was very favorite snacks' is incorrect; 'snacks' is plural, so 'they were my very favorite snacks' is correct.

× It's my favorite snacks and I can eat them, eat it like for the rest of my life, every day.

✓ They're my favorite snacks and I can eat them like that for the rest of my life, every day.

'Snacks' is plural, so the singular verb 'It's' is incorrect; it should be 'They're'. Also, 'eat it' is singular and does not agree with 'snacks'; it should be 'eat them'. The phrase 'eat them, eat it like for the rest of my life' is awkward and corrected to 'eat them like that for the rest of my life' for clarity.