Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains a small error with the word "next" which should be "snacks." Also, try to make your answer more concise and natural by avoiding unnecessary words. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, around 3 or 4 PM, when I feel a bit hungry between lunch and dinner.

提案: Your answer is understandable but informal and slightly unclear. Avoid phrases like "you know" and "Understand me?" in formal speaking. Also, try to give a more complete answer with a topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: I think eating too many snacks, especially sweets and candy, is unhealthy because they contain a lot of sugar and can cause health problems.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and is somewhat repetitive. Use the past tense correctly and avoid repeating words. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child, and I still enjoy them now as a teenager because I love their taste.

提案: Your answer is too short and lacks detail. Provide a complete sentence with a topic sentence and supporting details. Use linking words to explain why you like that snack or describe it.

例: I especially like chocolate because it tastes sweet and helps me feel happy when I eat it.

× Too much snacks, sweets or candy is not good for our health, you know. Understand me?

✓ Too many snacks, sweets, or candy are not good for our health, you know. Understand me?

The quantifier 'much' is used with uncountable nouns, while 'many' is used with countable nouns like 'snacks' and 'sweets'. Also, since 'snacks, sweets, or candy' is plural, the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. To improve, use 'too many' with countable nouns and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× Oh yes, I often eat snacks. Oh, when I was a child, then right now for teenage teenage because I love it so much.

✓ Oh yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child, and I still do now because I love them so much.

The sentence mixes present tense 'eat' with past context 'when I was a child'. The verb should be in past tense 'ate' to match the time frame. Also, 'teenage teenage' is unclear and redundant; it is better to say 'I still do now'. Additionally, 'love it' should be 'love them' to refer to plural 'snacks'. To improve, use past tense verbs for past events and maintain pronoun agreement.