Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时应避免重复表达，句子结构应更自然流畅。可以简洁直接地表达观点，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I usually eat snacks while watching movies or TV shows because it makes the experience more enjoyable and less boring.

提案: 回答中出现了语法错误和人称代词使用错误，应注意主谓一致和代词的正确使用。表达应更简洁，避免重复。

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they usually contain a lot of oil, sugar, and calories, which can harm our health.

提案: 时态使用不准确，句子结构不够自然。应注意时态一致，避免重复表达。

例: Yes, I often asked my mother to buy snacks for me when I was a child. If she didn't, I would cry and shout.

提案: 回答中有语义错误（马铃薯不是水果），且语气词过多，影响流畅性。应避免语义错误，减少口头语，表达更清晰。

例: My favorite snack is crepes because they taste delicious. I also like potatoes, but they are vegetables, not fruits.

× I often eat snacks when I watch a movie or TV shows because if I just watch the movie or TV shows I think it's boring so I will find some snacks to eat and makes me happy.

✓ I often eat snacks when I watch a movie or TV shows because if I just watch the movie or TV shows I think it's boring so I will find some snacks to eat and make me happy.

句子中主语是“I”，动词“makes”应改为“make”以保持主谓一致。主语“I”对应动词应使用原形动词。

× I don't think he's healthy for me to eat some snacks because the snacks are full of oil and sugar and it's often the high calories, so it's not so good for our body health.

✓ I don't think it's healthy for me to eat some snacks because the snacks are full of oil and sugar and they often have high calories, so it's not so good for our body health.

句子中“he's healthy”应为“it's healthy”，因为指的是“吃零食”这件事，不是“他”。另外，“it's often the high calories”结构不正确，应改为“they often have high calories”，使主谓一致且表达清晰。

× If she doesn't, if she didn't, I will cry and shout it.

✓ If she didn't, I would cry and shout.

条件句中使用过去时“didn't”，主句应使用“would”表示与过去事实相反的假设，且“shout it”表达不自然，应去掉“it”。

× Maybe the crepes is my favorite umm because it tastes good and umm my favorite fruit is umm potato so I think it umm the crepes are my favorite.

✓ Maybe the crepes are my favorite because they taste good and my favorite vegetable is potato, so I think the crepes are my favorite.

“crepes”是复数，动词应用复数形式“are”和“taste”。“potato”不是水果，应改为“vegetable”。句子结构需调整使表达更清晰。