Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks grammatical accuracy and clarity. Try to form complete sentences and directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence. Avoid redundancy and use linking words to explain your reasons logically.

例: I usually avoid eating snacks now because they can make me gain weight. For example, snacks often contain a lot of sugar and fat, which are unhealthy if consumed frequently.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains repetition. Make sure to express your opinion clearly and support it with specific reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas coherently.

例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy for me because they usually contain unhealthy ingredients like sugar and preservatives. Therefore, I try to avoid them to maintain good health.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and lacks coherence. Use past tense consistently and connect your ideas with linking words. Provide specific examples to enrich your response.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child. For instance, my mother used to give me candy as a reward when I got good grades at school.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words. Also, correct minor grammatical mistakes and make your sentences more natural.

例: I enjoy eating candy and chips during my free time. Usually, I eat chips while watching movies or TV series in my room, which makes the experience more enjoyable.

× I am not eat snacks no just because it snacks makes me get fat makes me way increase weight.

✓ I do not eat snacks now because snacks make me gain weight.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'am not eat' instead of the correct present simple negative form 'do not eat'. Also, 'snacks makes' should be 'snacks make' to agree with the plural subject. The phrase 'makes me get fat makes me way increase weight' is awkward and ungrammatical; it is corrected to 'make me gain weight' for clarity and correctness.

× No, it's not healthy for me to eat snacks. I think it it melts, it's healthy for me. Snacks include unhealthy ingredients.

✓ No, it's not healthy for me to eat snacks. I think if it melts, it's healthy for me. Snacks include unhealthy ingredients.

The phrase 'it it melts' is a typographical error and should be 'if it melts' to make sense. The rest of the sentence is grammatically correct.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I am a child. For my child, my mom gave me a candy for a gift. Rewarding me might get a great grades.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a child. When I was a child, my mom gave me candy as a gift. She rewarded me if I got good grades.

The sentence refers to past habits, so the past tense 'ate' and 'was' should be used instead of present tense 'eat' and 'am'. 'For my child' is incorrect and replaced with 'When I was a child'. 'A candy' is incorrect because 'candy' is uncountable; 'candy' without 'a' is correct. 'Rewarding me might get a great grades' is ungrammatical and corrected to 'She rewarded me if I got good grades' for clarity and correctness.

× I like to eat candy and chips in my spare time. I usually eat chips in my room through watching movies or watch series.

✓ I like to eat candy and chips in my spare time. I usually eat chips in my room while watching movies or watching series.

The phrase 'through watching movies or watch series' is incorrect. The correct preposition is 'while' to indicate simultaneous actions, and the verbs should be in the '-ing' form consistently: 'watching movies or watching series'.