Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite detailed and natural, but it is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to keep your answer within 4-5 sentences and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening around 4 or 5 PM. I prefer light and healthy options, such as a glass of smoothie or a bowl of dry fruits. Sometimes, I also prepare sprouts or a dosa to keep it nutritious and filling.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and be more specific with your vocabulary. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Whether snacks are healthy depends on their type. For me, I prefer light and nutritious snacks like banana smoothies, which provide vitamins and potassium. Additionally, sprouts and homemade foods like dosa are good sources of vitamins and carbohydrates.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Try to use past tense correctly and complete your thoughts clearly. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but they were mostly unhealthy junk food. I didn't know much about nutrition back then, and I was tempted by snacks like wafers, cakes, and chocolates. My mother later advised me about healthy eating habits.

提案: Your answer lists various snacks but lacks clarity and has some incomplete sentences. Try to organize your ideas clearly, avoid filler words, and complete your sentences. Use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: I like to eat healthy snacks such as smoothies, bowls of sprouts, fresh juices, dosas, and cheelas. However, on cheat days, I enjoy eating waffles because they are delicious and unique in taste.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young, but at that time my snacks were really unhealthy and junk food because I don't have much knowledge about the health factors and what you should eat and what you shouldn't.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but at that time my snacks were really unhealthy and junk food because I didn't have much knowledge about the health factors and what you should eat and what you shouldn't.

The sentence mixes present tense 'eat' and 'don't have' with past time reference 'when I was young'. To maintain tense consistency, past tense 'ate' and 'didn't have' should be used to correctly reflect past actions and states.

× It really depends on what kind of snacks are you indulging into.

✓ It really depends on what kind of snacks you are indulging in.

The correct preposition to use with 'indulging' is 'in', not 'into'. Also, the sentence structure should be declarative, so 'are you indulging' should be 'you are indulging'.

× So banana smoothie works for me because banana provides you with vitamins and potassium and also sprouts, which provides you with vitamins or maybe homemade food like dosa, which can help you have your carbon.

✓ So banana smoothie works for me because banana provides me with vitamins and potassium and also sprouts, which provide me with vitamins, or maybe homemade food like dosa, which can help me have my carbohydrates.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrectly used when referring to the speaker's own experience; it should be 'me'. Also, 'sprouts' is plural, so the verb should be 'provide'. 'Carbon' is incorrect; the intended word is 'carbohydrates'.

× Yes, I often eat snacks when I was young, but at that time my snacks were really unhealthy and junk food because I don't have much knowledge about the health factors and what you should eat and what you shouldn't.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, but at that time my snacks were really unhealthy and junk food because I didn't have much knowledge about the health factors and what I should eat and what I shouldn't.

The sentence should consistently use past tense 'ate' and 'didn't have' to match the past time frame. Also, 'you' should be 'I' to refer to the speaker's own knowledge and actions.