Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答没有直接回答问题，缺乏结构和细节，建议直接回答通常什么时候吃零食，并补充具体时间或场合。

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon after finishing my homework as a way to relax and reward myself.

提案: 回答表达不清，语法和词汇使用错误较多，建议使用更准确的词汇表达观点，并简洁明了地说明原因。

例: I don't think eating a lot of snacks is healthy because many snacks like cakes and chocolates contain too much sugar, so I eat them only occasionally.

提案: 时态使用不准确，表达重复，建议使用过去时态描述过去的习惯，并避免重复表达。

例: When I was young, I often ate snacks, especially when I felt sad or wanted to reward myself for doing well.

提案: 回答较好，但可以增加更多细节和连接词，使表达更流畅自然。

例: I enjoy eating cakes because they are soft and sweet. Moreover, I like sharing them with my friends and family, which creates wonderful memories for me.

× Get some good grades in my examination and I will give myself some rewards.

✓ If I get some good grades in my examination, I will give myself some rewards.

句子缺少条件从句的连接词“if”，导致句子结构不完整。应使用条件句表达未来可能发生的情况。

× I don't think it is close for me to eat a lot of snacks because the snacks such as cakes or chocolates are uncles for me so I will I eat them seldomly.

✓ I don't think it is good for me to eat a lot of snacks because snacks such as cakes or chocolates are unhealthy for me, so I eat them seldomly.

“close”用错，应为“good”；“uncles”拼写错误，应为“unhealthy”；“for me”位置调整使句子更通顺。

× I sometimes eat snacks when I was young.

✓ I sometimes ate snacks when I was young.

描述过去的习惯动作，动词应使用过去时态。

× If I feel disappointed, I will eat some snacks to make me happy.

✓ If I feel disappointed, I eat some snacks to make me happy.

条件句中表示习惯性动作时，主句应使用一般现在时。

× If I do well in my daily lives, I will use some snacks to get myself some rewards.

✓ If I do well in my daily life, I use some snacks to reward myself.

“daily lives”应为单数“daily life”；条件句主句使用一般现在时表达习惯动作；“get myself some rewards”表达不自然，改为“reward myself”。