Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang jelas dan terdapat beberapa kesalahan tata bahasa serta pengucapan yang membingungkan. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan langsung ke inti pertanyaan, serta gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren.

例: I usually eat snacks when I take a break from studying because it helps me feel refreshed. Also, if I feel hungry but don't know what to eat, I have a small snack to satisfy my hunger.

提案: Jawaban Anda mengandung banyak kesalahan tata bahasa dan pengucapan yang membuatnya sulit dipahami. Cobalah untuk menyusun kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta gunakan kosakata yang tepat untuk menjelaskan pendapat Anda tentang kesehatan makanan ringan.

例: I think snacks are not very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and artificial colors. Eating too many snacks can make you feel sick, so it's better to eat them only sometimes.

提案: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan banyak kalimat yang tidak lengkap atau tidak jelas. Cobalah untuk menjawab langsung dengan kalimat yang lengkap dan gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih logis dan mudah dimengerti.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, I usually had snacks after lunch or whenever I felt hungry.

提案: Jawaban Anda tidak jelas dan banyak kesalahan pengucapan serta tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk menyebutkan nama camilan dengan jelas dan jelaskan alasan Anda menyukainya dengan kalimat yang sederhana dan terstruktur.

例: That's a great question. Actually, I like to eat meatballs. It was my favorite snack when I was a child, but now I try not to eat too many because I want to stay healthy.

× Honestly I don't usually eat snack I love I did when I was a child but sometimes I eat like when I take a break from war of study because it helped me feel refreshed.

✓ Honestly, I don't usually eat snacks like I did when I was a child, but sometimes I eat them when I take a break from a war of study because it helps me feel refreshed.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to general instances of eating small amounts of food. Also, 'war of study' seems to be a typo or incorrect phrase; it should be 'a lot of study' or 'a period of study'. The verb 'helped' should be 'helps' to match the present tense context.

× Also if I feel hungry but I don't know what e-mail do it, I might have small snack to satisfy my hunger.

✓ Also, if I feel hungry but I don't know what to eat, I might have a small snack to satisfy my hunger.

The phrase 'what e-mail do it' is incorrect; it should be 'what to eat'. Also, 'small snack' needs an article 'a' before it.

× Absolutely, snack is wasn't healthy food because it contains a lot of sugar and a color is that will make you feel sick when you eat a lot of snacks.

✓ Absolutely, snacks aren't healthy food because they contain a lot of sugar and colors that will make you feel sick when you eat a lot of snacks.

The singular 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' to refer to snacks in general. 'Is wasn't' is incorrect; it should be 'aren't'. 'A color is' should be 'colors' to match plural form.

× That's why I would say snack it wasn't healthy foods.

✓ That's why I would say snacks aren't healthy foods.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' and 'wasn't' should be 'aren't' to agree with plural subject and present tense. 'Foods' is acceptable but 'food' is more common; however, 'foods' is not incorrect.

× But you can eat neck but sometimes.

✓ But you can eat snacks sometimes.

'Neck' is a typo for 'snack' or 'snacks'. Also, 'but sometimes' is redundant; 'sometimes' alone is sufficient.

× Absolutely. When I was young, I always eat snack and.

✓ Absolutely. When I was young, I always ate snacks.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match 'when I was young'. 'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'.

× We could say it's often I eat snack after Lance or maybe when I felt hungry.

✓ We could say I often ate snacks after lunch or maybe when I felt hungry.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'. 'Lance' is a typo for 'lunch'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity.

× Are you want it snakes? A lot of snacks.

✓ I wanted snacks, a lot of snacks.

'Are you want it snakes?' is incorrect; it should be 'I wanted snacks'. The original sentence is unclear and seems to be a mishearing or typo.

× That's why I always say because of snack.

✓ That's why I always say it's because of snacks.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks'. The sentence is incomplete and needs 'it's because of' for clarity.

× It's a great questions.

✓ It's a great question.

'Questions' should be singular 'question' to agree with 'a'.

× Actually I want it ticket balls.

✓ Actually, I want to eat ticket balls.

'Want it' should be 'want to eat'. 'Ticket balls' is assumed to be a snack name; no plural correction needed if it's a proper noun.

× It's a tease snack that I love when I was a child, but.

✓ It's a tasty snack that I loved when I was a child, but.

'Tease' is a typo for 'tasty'. 'Love' should be past tense 'loved' to match 'when I was a child'.

× I tried to not consume a lot of nice for my age right now because I want you eat a lot of.

✓ I try not to consume a lot of snacks for my age right now because I don't want to eat a lot.

'Tried to not' should be 'try not to' for present tense. 'Nice' is a typo for 'snacks'. 'I want you eat a lot of' is incorrect; it should be 'I don't want to eat a lot'.