Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors. Try to give a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise within 5 sentences.

例: I usually eat snacks whenever I feel hungry between meals. For example, I might have a biscuit or a piece of cake in the afternoon. This helps me keep my energy up until dinner.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical mistakes and awkward phrasing. Use linking words like 'however' properly and try to explain your opinion with clear reasons and examples.

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat. However, I sometimes eat snacks when I feel stressed or hungry between meals to keep my energy levels up.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Try to give a clear and direct response with supporting details. Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases and keep your sentences simple and correct.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my grandmother loved to treat me. She would give me different kinds of snacks every day, which made me very happy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant or incorrect information. Try to give a clear topic sentence and explain why you like that snack with relevant details. Avoid unnecessary or confusing phrases.

例: I like to eat chips, especially a popular Indian brand called Lays. Many people of all ages enjoy these chips because they are tasty and easy to eat as a quick snack.

× I usually don't have any specific time to eat snack.

✓ I usually don't have any specific time to eat snacks.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to general instances of eating small amounts of food, which is countable and usually plural in this context.

× Whenever I start getting accurate to eat something, I go and eat something like a biscuit or a. Cake.

✓ Whenever I start feeling hungry to eat something, I go and eat something like a biscuit or a cake.

The phrase 'start getting accurate to eat' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'start feeling hungry to eat' to indicate the desire to eat. Also, 'a. Cake' should be 'a cake' without the period.

× I think snack is not healthy becauses of only involves eating unhealthy foods.

✓ I think snacks are not healthy because they only involve eating unhealthy foods.

'Snack' should be plural 'snacks' to refer generally to such foods. Also, 'is' should be 'are' to agree with plural 'snacks'. The phrase 'becauses of only involves' is incorrect; it should be 'because they only involve'.

× However, whenever I feel stressed or hunger between meals, I tend to snacks to comfort myself or keep my energy up.

✓ However, whenever I feel stressed or hungry between meals, I tend to snack to comfort myself or keep my energy up.

The word 'hunger' should be the adjective 'hungry' to describe the feeling. Also, 'tend to snacks' is incorrect; it should be 'tend to snack' as 'tend to' is followed by the base verb form.

× Yes, definitely. I often eat snacks every day, every second, every minute becauses.

✓ Yes, definitely. I often ate snacks every day, every second, every minute because.

Since the question is about past habits ('when you were young'), the verb should be in past tense 'ate' instead of present 'eat'. Also, 'becauses' is incorrect; it should be 'because'.

× My grandma Crude could treat me such as that.

✓ My grandma could treat me like that.

The word 'Crude' seems misplaced or incorrect here. Also, 'such as that' is better expressed as 'like that' in this context.

× She could give each and everything that she had.

✓ She could give me everything that she had.

The phrase 'each and everything' is redundant; 'everything' suffices. Also, adding 'me' clarifies the recipient of the giving.

× Oh, or she had died for me.

✓ Oh, she would have done anything for me.

The phrase 'she had died for me' is awkward and incorrect here. The intended meaning is likely that she would do anything for me, so 'she would have done anything for me' is appropriate.

× So yes, I off.

✓ So yes, I often did.

The phrase 'I off' is incomplete and incorrect. It should be 'I often did' to indicate frequent past action.

× I like to eat. Uh, chips.

✓ I like to eat chips.

The sentence fragment 'I like to eat. Uh, chips.' should be combined for clarity and correctness.

× In India there is a brand called Lace which is popular in all gangsters or we can tell you it is more popular.

✓ In India, there is a brand called Lays which is popular among all youngsters, or we can say it is very popular.

'Lace' is likely a misspelling of 'Lays'. 'Popular in all gangsters' is incorrect; it should be 'popular among all youngsters'. Also, 'we can tell you it is more popular' is better expressed as 'we can say it is very popular'.

× For the age between 1 to 50 or higher because each and every day.

✓ For the age group between 1 to 50 or higher because people eat it every day.

The phrase is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'age group' clarifies meaning. Also, 'because each and every day' is incomplete; it should specify what happens every day.