Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些语法错误和重复，表达不够清晰。建议你用简洁的句子直接回答问题，并用连接词使句子更连贯。例如，避免重复单词，注意时态和句子结构。

例: I usually eat snacks when I am relaxing at home, especially while watching TV series late at night. Also, I often grab something to eat between classes.

提案: 回答中有很多语法和发音错误，表达不清晰。建议你用完整的句子表达观点，并举例说明。使用连接词使回答更流畅。

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because most of them are junk food, like chips and cookies. However, sometimes I choose healthier options such as nuts or fruit.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误和语法问题，影响理解。建议你用正确的词汇和句子结构表达过去的习惯，并提供具体细节。

例: Yes, I used to love sweets when I was a child. My pockets were always full of candy, and I often asked my parents to buy sweets whenever we went to the supermarket.

提案: 回答中有发音和词汇错误，表达不完整。建议你用完整的句子描述你喜欢的零食，并用连接词使回答更连贯。

例: I am a big fan of crispy or crunchy snacks like potato chips or pretzels. When I want something sweet, I usually choose chocolate bars or berries.

× Began watching watching TV seriers late at night and I also you really grab something between classes you know?

✓ I began watching TV series late at night and I also really grab something between classes, you know?

The original sentence starts with 'Began' without a subject, which is incorrect. A subject is needed before the verb 'began'. Also, 'watching' is repeated twice, which is a mistake. The phrase 'I also you really grab' is incorrect; it should be 'I also really grab'. The sentence needs proper subject-verb structure and removal of repeated words.

× Well definitely not. I mean most snacks are junk food chips. Uh, cookies starve like that, so absolutely the north. Great for your body, but sometimes there are healthier options like Nords or fruit.

✓ Well, definitely not. I mean, most snacks are junk food like chips, cookies, candy, and so on, so absolutely not great for your body. But sometimes there are healthier options like nuts or fruit.

The original sentence has several issues: 'cookies starve like that' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo; 'absolutely the north' should be 'absolutely not'; 'Nords' should be 'nuts'. Also, the sentence lacks proper punctuation and conjunctions to connect ideas clearly. Correcting these improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I remember at back my parents for sweets every time we went to the supermarket.

✓ I remember asking my parents for sweets every time we went to the supermarket.

The phrase 'at back my parents' is incorrect and unclear. The intended meaning is likely 'asking my parents'. Also, 'remember' is present tense, so the action following it should be in the gerund form 'asking' to indicate a remembered action. This correction aligns the sentence with proper tense and structure.

× Oh I am big fan of anything crispy or crunchy like potato chips or try see what.

✓ Oh, I am a big fan of anything crispy or crunchy like potato chips or rice crackers.

The original sentence misses the article 'a' before 'big fan'. Also, 'try see what' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; replacing it with 'rice crackers' makes sense in context. Proper use of articles and clear noun phrases improve the sentence.

× Oh when I am in the mood for something sweet I go for chocolate bars or. Boo Blerti.

✓ Oh, when I am in the mood for something sweet, I go for chocolate bars or blueberry tarts.

The original sentence ends abruptly with 'or. Boo Blerti.', which is unclear and incomplete. Adding a proper noun phrase like 'blueberry tarts' completes the sentence logically. Also, commas are added for clarity and correct sentence structure.