Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề để trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sau đó dùng các chi tiết hỗ trợ cụ thể và liên kết hợp lý. Tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: I usually eat snacks late at night, around 12:00 AM, especially when I am doing homework or watching movies. I enjoy snacking during movies because it helps me relax and concentrate better.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích lý do cụ thể và dùng từ vựng phù hợp. Hãy tránh lỗi ngữ pháp và dùng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because most snacks lack proper nutrition. Therefore, eating too many snacks can be harmful, so it's better to eat them only occasionally.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ. Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề trả lời trực tiếp, sau đó giải thích chi tiết với từ vựng phù hợp và câu cú mạch lạc hơn.

例: Actually, I didn't eat snacks often when I was young because my parents were quite strict about my diet. They didn't allow me to eat many snacks, so I rarely had the chance to try them.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời câu hỏi một cách rõ ràng với câu chủ đề, sau đó mô tả chi tiết về loại snack bạn thích và lý do. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu cú mạch lạc để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I often enjoy crispy snacks like chips or biscuits because I find them fun to eat. They also help me relax after a stressful day.

× Isabel late at night about 12:00 PM our when I do all the test light, when I'm do homework or when I'm watch movies are usually enjoy snack while watching movie.

✓ I usually eat snacks late at night, around 12:00 PM, when I finish all the tests, when I do homework, or when I watch movies. I usually enjoy snacks while watching movies.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure errors including incorrect word order and missing verbs. The sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction rearranges the sentence to a clear and grammatically correct structure, using proper verb forms and conjunctions.

× when I'm do homework or when I'm watch movies are usually enjoy snack while watching movie.

✓ when I do homework or when I watch movies, I usually enjoy snacks while watching movies.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'I'm do' and 'I'm watch' instead of 'I do' and 'I watch'. The present continuous form 'I'm doing' or 'I'm watching' is not appropriate here because the sentence describes habitual actions. The correction uses the simple present tense which is correct for habitual actions.

× It makes me feel really relaxed and I feel more concentrate.

✓ It makes me feel really relaxed and I feel more concentrated.

The word 'concentrate' is a verb, but here an adjective is needed to describe the feeling. The correct adjective is 'concentrated'. The correction changes 'concentrate' to 'concentrated' to properly describe the state of feeling focused.

× Definitely no because you know, snappy not have much nutrition that in our helmet.

✓ Definitely not, because you know, snacks do not have much nutrition in our diet.

The original sentence uses 'snappy not have' which is incorrect. The modal verb 'do not' is needed to form the negative present tense. Also, 'helmet' is incorrect and should be 'diet'. The correction uses 'do not have' to correctly negate the verb and replaces 'helmet' with 'diet' for meaning.

× So is it really harm if you it's neck too much?

✓ So it is really harmful if you eat snacks too much.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'Is it really harm' should be 'it is really harmful' and 'if you it's neck too much' is incorrect and should be 'if you eat snacks too much'. The correction restructures the sentence to a clear and grammatically correct form.

× So I think it'll be just a snack that you should have a little bit of time.

✓ So I think snacks should only be eaten a little bit of the time.

The original sentence misuses 'it'll be just a snack that you should have a little bit of time' which is unclear. The correction clarifies the meaning using 'should only be eaten a little bit of the time' to express moderation using the modal verb 'should'.

× Actually no, because you know my parents were quiet strictly about my what I what I eat so they don't let me.

✓ Actually no, because you know my parents were quite strict about what I ate, so they didn't let me.

The original sentence has incorrect quantifier 'quiet strictly' which should be 'quite strict'. Also, tense inconsistency is corrected from 'don't let me' to 'didn't let me' to match past tense context.

× It's not when I was a kid so I don't have a chain and never have a chain to try the snack when it was when other early age.

✓ It wasn't when I was a kid, so I didn't have a chance and never had a chance to try snacks at an early age.

The original sentence has multiple tense errors and incorrect words like 'chain' instead of 'chance'. The correction uses past tense verbs 'wasn't', 'didn't have', and 'never had' to correctly describe past events and replaces 'chain' with 'chance'.

× I often enjoy some, you know, the crispy snack like the. See with snack or the biscuit at heart and may I think is a quiet fund when eating and it also helped me to relax myself after straight time.

✓ I often enjoy some crispy snacks like seaweed snacks or biscuits, and I think it is quite fun to eat them. It also helps me to relax after a stressful time.

The original sentence has singular/plural errors such as 'snack' instead of 'snacks', 'biscuit' instead of 'biscuits', and 'is a quiet fund' which should be 'is quite fun'. Also, 'helped' is changed to 'helps' to match present tense. The correction fixes these errors and clarifies the meaning.