Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by supporting details using linking words. Keep your answer natural and concise within 5 sentences.

例: I usually eat snacks during my work breaks. For example, when I feel hungry in the afternoon, I have a small snack to relax and recharge.

提案: Your answer has some vocabulary errors and lacks clarity. Use correct words and provide specific supporting details with linking words to make your answer more effective and natural.

例: Yes, I think eating healthy snacks is good for me because they contain important vitamins and minerals. For instance, fruits and nuts help maintain my energy and health.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Respond directly with a clear topic sentence and add specific details using linking words to improve coherence and naturalness.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. However, most of them were unhealthy, such as chips and sweets, which I now try to avoid.

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks structure. Start with a clear topic sentence and provide specific examples with linking words to make your answer more natural and effective.

例: I like to eat a variety of snacks. For example, I enjoy fries and sandwiches, but I also try to include healthy options like vegetables and fruits.

× Are you often a snack then I have a break to my work and it failed me. Relax and I I am when I am hungry I also often a snack.

✓ I often eat a snack when I have a break from my work to relax, and I also eat a snack when I am hungry.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence structure and unclear meaning. The phrase 'Are you often a snack' is incorrect and confusing. The corrected sentence rearranges the words to form a clear and grammatically correct sentence that fits the context of the question.

× I eat a snack which was healthy for me and include many retirements and minerals and also good for my health.

✓ I eat snacks that are healthy for me and include many nutrients and minerals, which are also good for my health.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'which was' instead of 'that are' to refer to snacks (plural). Also, 'retirements' is a wrong word; the correct word is 'nutrients'. The correction fixes pronoun agreement and word choice to improve clarity and correctness.

× Yes, I usually open a snack then I'm young that it is not more more healthy.

✓ Yes, I usually ate snacks when I was young, but they were not very healthy.

The original sentence uses present tense 'open' and 'I'm' incorrectly for a past context. 'Open a snack' is also an unusual phrase; 'ate snacks' is more appropriate. The correction changes verbs to past tense and improves sentence clarity.

× Are used to eat fries, sandwiches and others, which is good for our health, including vegetables and fruits.

✓ I used to eat fries, sandwiches, and other foods, which are good for our health, including vegetables and fruits.

The original sentence starts with 'Are used to eat' which is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'I used to eat' to indicate past habitual action. Also, 'which is' should be 'which are' to agree with the plural subject. The correction fixes sentence structure and subject-verb agreement.