Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and concise response directly addressing the question, and avoid irrelevant or confusing phrases. Use simple linking words if needed to connect ideas logically.

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening while watching TV or reading books. This helps me relax after a long day.

提案: Your answer has many grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words. Also, be specific about why snacks may be unhealthy.

例: I think eating snacks every day is not healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and salt. If we eat them regularly, it can lead to weight gain and other health problems.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has many grammatical errors. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid unclear phrases and focus on your personal experience.

例: When I was young, I often ate healthy snacks like bananas, apples, and yogurt with sprinkles. In my area, people preferred natural snacks rather than processed ones.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by using better linking words and more varied vocabulary. Try to combine your ideas into a coherent response with specific details.

例: I like to eat healthy snacks such as bananas, apples, and other fruits. Additionally, I enjoy yogurt with sprinkles because it is tasty and nutritious.

× I usually eat the snacks while watching TV or reading books in the evening.

✓ I usually eat snacks while watching TV or reading books in the evening.

The use of 'the snacks' is incorrect here because it refers to specific snacks already known, but the sentence talks about snacks in general. Removing 'the' makes it grammatically correct and natural.

× I take this next.

✓ I take this next year.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'year' clarifies the time reference and completes the sentence structure.

× It very year.

✓ It happens every year.

The original sentence lacks a verb and uses incorrect words. 'It happens every year' is a correct and complete sentence expressing the intended meaning.

× It is not healthy for you eat as snacks in daily vee because it has so many calories like sugar, salty and unhealthy fact.

✓ It is not healthy for you to eat snacks daily because they have many calories like sugar, salt, and unhealthy fat.

The sentence has missing 'to' before 'eat', incorrect plural forms, and wrong word choices. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.

× Any consumer assess really and if we could if we consume really daily and it gives it gain my weight also.

✓ Any consumer should assess carefully, and if we consume snacks daily, it can cause weight gain.

The original sentence is unclear and grammatically incorrect. Rephrasing with correct verb forms and clearer structure improves understanding.

× Whenever young I prefer to eat healthy snack like banana or some apples and I prefer to eat the yogurt with sprinkles and it's very healthy for me whenever the young because in my area there nobody knows snacks are there but I'll take up her this.

✓ When I was young, I preferred to eat healthy snacks like bananas or apples, and I preferred to eat yogurt with sprinkles. It was very healthy for me because in my area, nobody knew about snacks, but I ate these.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly and has several grammatical errors. Using past tense consistently and correcting plural forms and sentence structure improves clarity.

× I like to eat a healthy snack like banana, apples and some other fruits.

✓ I like to eat healthy snacks like bananas, apples, and other fruits.

The singular 'a healthy snack' conflicts with the plural examples. Using plural 'healthy snacks' and plural forms of fruits is grammatically correct.

× I prefer to eat yogurt with. Sprinkle it and it's very good way to eat and it's a healthy food.

✓ I prefer to eat yogurt with sprinkles, and it's a very good way to eat healthy food.

The original sentence has punctuation errors and unclear pronoun use. Correcting punctuation and sentence structure clarifies the meaning.