Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors, which affects naturalness and effectiveness. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, use correct vocabulary, and avoid redundancy. For example, specify the time and reason for eating snacks, and link your ideas coherently.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because I feel hungry then. I often enjoy eating fruit while watching TV or a movie, which makes the experience more relaxing.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear vocabulary and sentence structure. Try to give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific examples using linking words. Use relevant vocabulary related to health and food.

例: I think it depends on the type of snack. For example, fresh fruits are healthy because they provide vitamins, but processed snacks often contain a lot of sugar and fat, which are not good for health.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains inappropriate words and unclear ideas. Please respond politely and clearly, directly answering the question with supporting details. Use simple, correct sentences and relevant vocabulary.

例: I sometimes ate snacks when I was young, but my parents did not allow me to eat too many because they thought snacks were unhealthy and could harm my teeth and body.

提案: Your answer has good ideas but is unclear and repetitive. Try to give a clear topic sentence, then explain with specific reasons using linking words. Use appropriate vocabulary related to health and appearance.

例: I like to eat fruit because there are many kinds to choose from. Moreover, fruits are healthy and help improve my skin, which makes me look better.

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✓ I do light things in the afternoon because then I'm hungry and I use them and I like eating snacks while watching TV, movies, and films.

The phrase 'lighted things neck' is incorrect; 'light things' is the correct form. 'In there' should be 'then' to indicate time. 'Eating equity' is likely a mishearing or mispronunciation of 'eating snacks' or similar. 'With the watching the TV' should be 'while watching TV'. The present participle 'watching' is correctly used here to indicate simultaneous actions.

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✓ It depends on the day because nowadays there are lots of snacks like fruit, which is very good for helping people stay healthy; however, some processed snacks contain lots of sugar and fat.

The phrase 'in nowadays' is incorrect; 'nowadays' does not require a preposition. 'Have lots of the next like fruit Nurse for' is unclear and corrected to 'there are lots of snacks like fruit'. Prepositions should be used correctly to indicate time and place. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

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✓ Sometimes because my parents didn't allow me to eat snacks much because snacks are not good for my health. The colours and fats in snacks affect my body.

The sentence uses present tense 'are' incorrectly when referring to past events; it should be past tense 'didn't allow'. 'Eating snacks loss' is incorrect; it should be 'to eat snacks much'. 'Nick' is likely 'snacks'. The explanation clarifies the past tense usage and corrects vocabulary and sentence structure.

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✓ Fruit. Yes, because fruits have lots of types which I can choose from. And the first day is very, very varied, good for my health and good for my skin, which makes me have beautiful skin.

The word 'ties' is corrected to 'types' to indicate varieties. 'Fruit' is both singular and plural, but 'fruits' is used here to indicate different kinds. 'Made me have beauty skin' is corrected to 'makes me have beautiful skin' to use the correct adjective and present tense for habitual action.