Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with clear sentence structure and avoid unnecessary words. For example, start with a topic sentence and then add specific details using linking words.

例: I usually eat snacks in the late afternoon, around 4 to 5 PM, when I start feeling hungry before dinner.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clarity. Make sure to directly answer the question and explain your opinion with clear reasons. Use simple and correct vocabulary to express your ideas.

例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many snacks are fried in used oil and contain unhealthy ingredients.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear words and grammar mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. For example, I enjoyed eating chips and cookies after school because they were convenient and tasty.

提案: Your answer is very unclear and contains many errors. Focus on giving a clear and direct answer with specific examples. Use appropriate vocabulary related to the topic and avoid irrelevant or confusing words.

例: I like to eat fruits as snacks, especially apples and raisins, because they are healthy and provide natural sugars and vitamins.

× I usually it's nice in the late afternoon when I take T and around 4:00 to 5:00 PM when I start feeling a bit hungry before dinner.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the late afternoon when I take tea, and around 4:00 to 5:00 PM when I start feeling a bit hungry before dinner.

The original sentence lacks a clear verb for the subject 'I' and contains unclear phrasing 'it's nice'. The correction adds the verb 'eat snacks' to clarify the action and replaces 'take T' with 'take tea' for clarity. This improves sentence structure and meaning.

× No, it is not healthy for me too.

✓ No, it is not healthy for me either.

The word 'too' is incorrectly used here; 'either' is the correct word to express a negative agreement. 'Too' is used in positive contexts, while 'either' is used in negative contexts.

× It's nice because they are building used oil and they're not ready for me.

✓ It's not nice because they are made with used oil and they're not good for me.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect phrases like 'building used oil' and 'not ready for me'. The correction clarifies the meaning by stating the snacks are made with used oil and are unhealthy, improving sentence clarity and structure.

× Yes, I used to witness quite open 'cause I'm addicted with eating snails on daily basis for example.

✓ Yes, I used to eat quite often because I was addicted to eating snacks on a daily basis, for example.

The phrase 'used to witness quite open' is incorrect; 'used to eat quite often' is appropriate. Also, 'addicted with' should be 'addicted to'. 'Snails' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'snacks'. Prepositions and word choice are corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× Well dude enjoyed having supposed and chips after school 'cause they're convenient and tasty.

✓ Well, I enjoyed having snacks and chips after school because they're convenient and tasty.

The original sentence contains unclear words like 'dude' and 'supposed'. Replacing 'dude' with 'I' and 'supposed' with 'snacks' corrects the sentence. Also, 'cause' is expanded to 'because' for formality and clarity.

× I like to share our videos Ness which I like but my favorite would be fruits, especially apples and run as there are no leashes but also healthy providing natural sugars and she actually with domains I protein throughout my body.

✓ I like to eat various snacks, but my favorite would be fruits, especially apples and raisins, as they have no additives and are also healthy, providing natural sugars and helping to supply protein throughout my body.

The original sentence is unclear and contains many errors and nonsensical phrases like 'share our videos Ness', 'run as there are no leashes', and 'she actually with domains I protein'. The correction clarifies the intended meaning, corrects vocabulary, and improves sentence structure for coherence and grammatical correctness.