Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn cần rõ ràng và mạch lạc hơn, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ không phù hợp. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi, sử dụng câu chủ đề và bổ sung chi tiết cụ thể, đồng thời dùng các từ nối để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I usually eat snacks whenever I have free time, both at home and when I'm outside. For example, I often snack with my friends at school or buy from street vendors. Although I know eating too many snacks isn't healthy, I still enjoy them occasionally.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời rõ ràng và tránh lặp từ, đồng thời sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy trình bày ý kiến của bạn một cách cụ thể và có lý do rõ ràng.

例: To be honest, eating too many snacks is harmful and not good for health. However, since I really like them, I don't pay much attention to this fact. I try to limit my intake but sometimes I can't resist.

提案: Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng từ nối để câu trả lời trôi chảy hơn. Bổ sung thêm chi tiết cụ thể để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn.

例: When I was younger, I used to eat snacks more often than I do now. It was one of my favorite activities, and I really enjoyed trying different kinds of snacks.

提案: Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên trình bày sở thích của mình một cách cụ thể và giải thích lý do, đồng thời dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Personally, I have a sweet tooth, so I prefer sweets like candies and cookies. Although I know they contain a lot of sugar, I enjoy them very much. However, I'm trying to reduce my sugar intake for better health.

× Well as a big fat lips next I eat it whenever I have time like I eat it at my home and going outside.

✓ Well, as a big fan, I eat snacks whenever I have time, like at my home or when going outside.

The phrase 'big fat lips next' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo for 'big fan'. Also, 'I eat it at my home and going outside' mixes verb forms and pronouns incorrectly. Correct pronouns and parallel verb forms improve clarity.

× I eat it with my friends at school or in some St. vendors.

✓ I eat it with my friends at school or from some street vendors.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to buying from vendors; 'from' is appropriate. Also, 'St.' should be expanded to 'street' for clarity.

× Yeah, like, like I'm a big fan, so. And though I know that is negative.

✓ Yeah, I am a big fan, even though I know it is unhealthy.

The sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the ideas into a complete sentence improves coherence and grammatical correctness.

× Glad to be honest, it is harmful to eat too much Next, like next or just like it isn't healthy for your health.

✓ To be honest, it is harmful to eat too many snacks, and it isn't healthy for your health.

'Glad to be honest' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'To be honest'. Also, 'too much Next' is unclear and likely a mishearing; 'too many snacks' fits better. 'For your health' is redundant but acceptable.

× Although I'm aware of that, I. I am a big fan X next so I don't like. I don't consider it too much.

✓ Although I'm aware of that, I am a big fan of snacks, so I don't mind eating them too much.

The sentence is fragmented and contains unclear phrases like 'X next'. Rephrasing for clarity and correct pronoun use is necessary.

× Well to be honest I think I'm young now but back when I was younger I like I used to eat snacks and more than I do now but it is next.

✓ Well, to be honest, I think I'm young now, but back when I was younger, I used to eat snacks more than I do now.

The phrase 'I like I used to eat' is incorrect; 'I used to eat' is the correct past tense expression. Also, 'it is next' is unclear and removed for clarity.

× It's just my go to activity and I enjoyed a lot.

✓ It's just my go-to activity, and I enjoyed it a lot.

'Go to' should be hyphenated as 'go-to' when used as an adjective. Also, 'enjoyed a lot' needs an object; adding 'it' completes the sentence.

× How? Personally I have a sweet tooth so I prefer like some sweets next like candies or cookies.

✓ Personally, I have a sweet tooth, so I prefer sweets like candies or cookies.

The word 'How?' is unnecessary and confusing here. 'Some sweets next like' is incorrect; removing 'some' and 'next' clarifies the sentence.

× Hello I know that it contains and much sugar but I just I enjoyed so much that but I'm trying to.

✓ I know that they contain a lot of sugar, but I just enjoy them so much. However, I'm trying to cut down.

'Hello' is inappropriate here. 'It contains and much sugar' is incorrect; 'they contain a lot of sugar' is correct because 'candies or cookies' are plural. The sentence is fragmented and needs completion for clarity.