Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct sentence structures and linking words. For example, start with a clear topic sentence and then explain with reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid short, incomplete sentences.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because I feel full after lunch for a few hours. However, I get hungry again later in the afternoon, so I like to have a light snack then.

提案: Focus on clear and complete sentences with correct grammar. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide specific details about why the snacks are healthy. Avoid unclear words and pronunciation errors.

例: Yes, I think eating snacks can be healthy because I usually choose roasted chicken breast without oil. It provides protein, which helps me feel full and energized.

提案: Try to organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details using linking words like 'because' and 'so'. Also, use correct vocabulary and avoid filler sounds like 'uhm'.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially after school. Because I had swimming class, I needed to keep my energy up, so I usually ate snacks to help me.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clear sentence structures. Provide specific details about the snack and why you like it. Avoid unclear phrases and pronunciation mistakes.

例: I like to eat roasted chicken breast as a snack because it is easy to eat and very healthy. It provides about 10 grams of protein, which is enough to keep me full during the afternoon.

× Are usually it's next in the afternoon because after lunch.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because after lunch,

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing subject-verb structure. The correct present tense sentence should start with the subject 'I' followed by the verb 'usually eat'. Also, 'it's next in the afternoon' is unclear and incorrect. The phrase 'in the afternoon' should be placed after the verb phrase to indicate time.

× Are usually it's next in the afternoon because after lunch.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because after lunch,

The sentence lacks proper sentence structure with subject and verb placement. 'Are usually it's next' is not a correct phrase. The sentence should start with the subject 'I' followed by the adverb 'usually' and the verb 'eat' to form a proper sentence.

× I will be full for like a few hours.

✓ I am full for a few hours after lunch.

The use of 'will be' is incorrect here because the sentence describes a habitual state, not a future event. The phrase 'like a few hours' is informal and unnecessary. The sentence should be in present tense to describe a usual condition.

× But in the afternoon.

✓ But in the afternoon,

This is a sentence fragment lacking a main verb or clause. It should be connected to the previous or next sentence or completed to form a full sentence.

× I get hungry again later.

✓ I get hungry again later in the afternoon.

The sentence is mostly correct but adding 'in the afternoon' clarifies the time reference and improves sentence completeness.

× I ate.

✓ I eat

The question is about current habits, so present tense 'I eat' is appropriate instead of past tense 'I ate'.

× I always eat healthy snacks.

✓ I always eat healthy snacks.

This sentence is correct and needs no correction.

× So is a breast chick in ? Roasted with no oils.

✓ For example, roasted chicken breast with no oil.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'So is a breast chick in ?' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clearly states the example snack with proper noun and verb usage.

× Ann is also provide proteins.

✓ It also provides protein.

'Ann' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'and' or 'it'. The subject should be 'it' referring to the chicken breast. 'Provide' should be 'provides' to agree with singular subject. 'Proteins' is usually uncountable in this context, so 'protein' is correct.

× Which keep me. Fool.

✓ which keeps me full.

The clause should be connected to the previous sentence. 'keep' should be 'keeps' to agree with singular subject 'which'. 'Fool' is a misspelling of 'full'.

× I usually. It I used to eat next when I was young after school.

✓ I usually ate snacks when I was young after school.

The sentence is fragmented and has extra words. 'Used to eat next' is incorrect; 'ate snacks' is correct past tense. 'Usually' should be followed by past tense verb 'ate' to describe past habit.

× Be 'cause after school.

✓ Because after school,

'Be 'cause' is informal and fragmented. It should be 'Because after school,' to start a dependent clause.

× I have swimming class.

✓ I had swimming class.

The question is about past habits, so past tense 'had' is appropriate instead of present tense 'have'.

× And after that my energy wind ow.

✓ And after that, my energy went down.

The phrase 'energy wind ow' is a mispronunciation or typo. The correct phrase is 'energy went down' to indicate decrease in energy.

× So I need to keep my energy.

✓ So I needed to keep my energy.

Since the context is past habits, past tense 'needed' is appropriate instead of present tense 'need'.

× I like to eat breast chicken roasted.

✓ I like to eat roasted chicken breast.

The word order is incorrect. The correct order is 'roasted chicken breast' with adjective before noun.

× Snack with come in to to off ships is easy to eat.

✓ Snacks like potato chips are easy to eat.

The original sentence is unclear and contains errors. 'Come in to to off ships' is incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning with proper vocabulary and structure.

× And it's so healthy that it provides me like. 10 grams in protein, which is enough for my whole afternoon.

✓ And it's so healthy that it provides me with about 10 grams of protein, which is enough for my whole afternoon.

The phrase 'like. 10 grams in protein' is incorrect. It should be 'about 10 grams of protein'. Also, 'provides me with' is the correct verb phrase.