Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use correct verb forms and plural nouns, and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon or evening, especially when I feel a little hungry between meals. For example, I enjoy having snacks while watching movies or reading a book.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has many grammatical mistakes. Focus on expressing your opinion clearly and use specific examples. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically.

例: I think eating snacks in moderation is okay, but eating too much can be unhealthy. Therefore, I try to choose healthy snacks like fruits instead of instant or processed foods.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to form complete sentences and explain your experience clearly with supporting details.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially when I was outside. Many people gave me money, so I could buy snacks to enjoy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Please clarify the snack name and use correct sentence structure. Provide specific details and use linking words to improve coherence.

例: My favorite snacks are potato chips because they are tasty and come in different flavors. I usually eat them in the afternoon or while watching movies.

× I enjoy eating snacks while watching movie or starting.

✓ I enjoy eating snacks while watching a movie or starting.

The noun 'movie' is countable and singular here, so it requires the definite article 'a' before it. Without the article, the sentence is grammatically incorrect.

× I think eating snacks in our limited amount it OK but too much can be unhealthy.

✓ I think eating snacks in a limited amount is OK but too much can be unhealthy.

The phrase 'our limited amount' is incorrect here; 'a limited amount' is the correct quantifier to express a small quantity. Also, 'it OK' should be 'is OK' to be grammatically correct.

× I tried to eat by choosing healthiest snacks sometimes like food or not instant of always eating saves or some food.

✓ I try to eat by choosing the healthiest snacks sometimes, like natural food, instead of always eating snacks or some food.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'tried' should be 'try' to match present tense; 'healthiest' needs the definite article 'the'; 'not instant of' is incorrect and should be 'instead of'; 'saves' is likely a typo for 'snacks'. Prepositions and word choices are corrected for clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I like to eat snacks when I was outside when I many people give me the money and I bring snacks.

✓ Yes, I liked to eat snacks when I was outside because many people gave me money and I bought snacks.

The sentence mixes present and past tense incorrectly. 'Like' should be 'liked' to match past tense context. 'Give' should be 'gave' and 'bring' should be 'bought' to reflect past actions. Also, 'when I many people give me the money' is ungrammatical and is corrected to 'because many people gave me money'.

× My my favorite is taxes saved the Akron see tasty and come in different flavors which I really enjoy.

✓ My favorite snacks are Takis; they are tasty and come in different flavors which I really enjoy.

The original sentence has unclear and incorrect words: 'taxes saved the Akron see' seems to be a mishearing or typo for 'Takis'. Also, 'My my' is a repetition error. The pronoun 'they' is used to refer to the plural noun 'Takis'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and proper pronoun use.

× I I usually have them in the afternoon or while watching movie.

✓ I usually have them in the afternoon or while watching a movie.

Again, 'movie' is a singular countable noun and requires the article 'a' before it. The repeated 'I' is removed for correctness.