Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, and provide specific details using linking words. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon because I feel hungry after school. For example, I like to eat chocolates as they are not too sweet and satisfy my cravings.

提案: Your answer is too short and unclear. Provide a direct response and explain your opinion with reasons or examples. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I think eating snacks is not very healthy because many snacks contain a lot of sugar and fat. However, sometimes I eat healthy snacks like fruits to stay fit.

提案: Your answer does not address the question. Try to answer directly about your snacking habits when you were young, using simple sentences and relevant details.

例: When I was young, I often ate snacks like biscuits and fruits after school. I enjoyed them because they gave me energy to play.

提案: Your answer is clear but very brief. Try to add more details and use linking words to make your answer more interesting and complete.

例: I like to eat chocolate snacks, especially Kit Kat. It is my favorite because it has a crispy texture and a sweet taste that I enjoy very much.

× Yes, I like oh snap some.

✓ Yes, I like some Oh Snap.

The phrase 'oh snap some' is incorrectly ordered and 'some' is a quantifier that should precede the noun. Correct word order is 'some Oh Snap'. Also, 'Oh Snap' is a brand name and should be capitalized.

× Because, uh. It is a very. Bob.

✓ Because, uh, it is very good.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Bob' seems to be a mispronunciation of 'good'. The sentence should be combined and corrected to 'Because, uh, it is very good.' to make sense.

× Not very sweet snacks.

✓ They are not very sweet snacks.

The original sentence lacks a subject and verb. Adding 'They are' makes it a complete sentence. Also, 'not very sweet' correctly modifies 'snacks'.

× I like chocolates.

✓ I like chocolate.

'Chocolate' is generally used as an uncountable noun when referring to the substance or food in general. Using 'chocolates' implies individual pieces or types, which may not be intended here.

× It's Naksa.

✓ It's not healthy.

'Naksa' appears to be a mispronunciation or incorrect word. The intended phrase is likely 'not healthy'. Correcting to 'It's not healthy.' clarifies the meaning.

× Anyway.

✓ Anyway, I try to avoid snacks.

'Anyway' alone is a sentence fragment. It should be connected to a complete sentence to convey meaning. Adding 'I try to avoid snacks.' completes the thought.

× My age is 10 years old.

✓ I am 10 years old.

The phrase 'My age is 10 years old' is unnatural. The correct way to express age is 'I am 10 years old.'

× I am a small children so I not understand English.

✓ I am a small child so I do not understand English.

'Children' is plural, but 'a' indicates singular. The correct singular form is 'child'. Also, 'not understand' requires auxiliary 'do' to form 'do not understand'.

× Please speak in Punjabi.

✓ Please speak Punjabi.

The preposition 'in' is unnecessary here. 'Speak Punjabi' is the correct phrase to request language use.