Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，句子结构混乱，表达不自然。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并用连贯的句子说明原因。

例: I usually eat snacks throughout the day because I often skip breakfast in the morning. Therefore, I need to eat snacks to keep my energy up.

提案: 回答较为直接，但缺少连贯的连接词和具体细节。建议使用连接词丰富句子，并具体说明为什么不健康。

例: I think eating snacks is unhealthy, especially because I like spicy and salty ones. However, I find it hard to control myself, which may lead to health problems like high blood pressure.

提案: 语法错误较多，表达不够准确。建议注意时态和句子结构，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: No, I didn't often eat snacks when I was young because my parents didn't allow it. Also, I didn't have extra money to buy snacks, so I seldom ate them.

提案: 表达不清晰，词汇使用错误。建议使用正确的词汇和句子结构，清楚描述喜欢的零食种类。

例: I like snacks that are salty or spicy, such as potato chips.

× Actually I eat snacks in the whole day.

✓ Actually I eat snacks throughout the whole day.

这里的表达不够自然，应该用介词短语'throughout the whole day'来表示'整天'，而不是'in the whole day'。

× I don't have a habit of having. Breakfast in the morning, so I thought. So I need to eat some snacks at that time and I.

✓ I don't have a habit of having breakfast in the morning, so I think I need to eat some snacks at that time.

原句断句错误，句子不完整且有多余的句号，导致表达不清晰。应将句子连贯起来，去掉多余的句号，使句子完整。

× I think eating snacks is unhealthy and especially I like eating snacks spicy and salty but I just can't control myself.

✓ I think eating snacks is unhealthy, especially because I like eating snacks that are spicy and salty, but I just can't control myself.

原句中缺少连接词，导致句子结构混乱。需要添加连接词'especially because'和关系代词'that are'来使句子更通顺。

× No be 'cause my parents don't allow me to eat snacks and as a child I didn't have extra money to buy snacks, so I seldom eat snacks when I were young or when I was young.

✓ No, because my parents didn't allow me to eat snacks and as a child I didn't have extra money to buy snacks, so I seldom ate snacks when I was young.

原句中使用了错误的时态和人称代词，'don't'应为过去式'didn't'，'eat'应为过去式'ate'，'were'应为单数过去式'was'。

× I like snacks that taste to UN salty or spicy like some chips.

✓ I like snacks that taste unsalty or spicy, like some chips.

原句中'taste to UN salty'表达错误，正确应为'taste unsalty'，表示'不咸'。另外，'like some chips'前应加逗号。