Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Try to give a full sentence that directly answers the question with specific details. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, especially when I feel hungry between lunch and dinner.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and incomplete. Try to avoid redundancy and finish your sentences. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide clear reasons.

例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because most snacks like burgers and pizzas contain a lot of fat and calories. However, I still enjoy them occasionally because they taste good.

提案: Your answer has some grammar mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to use correct verb tenses and clearer expressions. Also, avoid repeating the same examples unnecessarily.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because they were delicious. I especially liked pizzas and burgers, which made me feel very happy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas clearly and use correct vocabulary. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and provide specific examples.

例: It depends on my mood. Sometimes I like sweet snacks like yogurt, and other times I prefer spicy snacks such as chow mein or noodles.

× I think it depends. Sometime I.

✓ I think it depends. Sometimes I do.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a verb, making it a sentence structure error. 'Sometime' should be 'Sometimes' to indicate frequency, and the sentence needs a verb to be complete. Suggestion: use 'Sometimes I do' to complete the thought.

× I often eat snacks when I wear young because it was really delicious.

✓ I often ate snacks when I was young because they were really delicious.

The sentence mixes present tense 'eat' with past time 'when I was young'. Also, 'wear' is a typo for 'was'. The verb tense should be past tense to match the time frame. Suggestion: use past tense verbs 'ate' and 'was' and plural pronoun 'they' for snacks.

× And I really prefer them because whenever I eat snacks I feel like I am on cloud 9 because like Pisa such as pizzas and burgers.

✓ And I really preferred them because whenever I ate snacks I felt like I was on cloud 9 because of foods such as pizzas and burgers.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses and uses 'Pisa' which seems to be a typo for 'pizza'. Also, 'like Pisa such as pizzas' is redundant and unclear. Suggestion: use past tense consistently and clarify the examples.

× Again, it depends on my mood because sometimes I crave for some sweet dishes or and sometimes I crave for like spices more like chow means or noodles and I really like.

✓ Again, it depends on my mood because sometimes I crave some sweet dishes and sometimes I crave spicy foods like chow mein or noodles, which I really like.

The phrase 'crave for' is incorrect; 'crave' does not require 'for'. Also, 'chow means' is a typo for 'chow mein'. The sentence is also incomplete and needs restructuring for clarity.

× Some toy yogurt and like streets it.

✓ I also like some yogurt and street food.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Toy yogurt' and 'streets it' seem to be errors or typos. Suggestion: clarify and complete the sentence to express liking yogurt and street food.