Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and has grammatical errors. Try to give a direct response with clear sentence structure and avoid unnecessary pauses. For example, say when you usually eat snacks and why, using simple and correct sentences.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon when I feel hungry between meals because I don't like to eat snacks often.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has many unclear parts. Try to give a clear opinion and explain why snacks may not be healthy, using simple vocabulary and linking words.

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many snacks have high sugar and fat. Therefore, it is better to eat proper meals instead.

提案: Your answer is unclear and has many mistakes. Try to answer directly and explain your habits in childhood with simple sentences and linking words.

例: No, I did not often eat snacks when I was young because my mother always encouraged me to eat meals, which are better for health.

提案: Your answer is short and a bit repetitive. Try to give a clear answer with reasons or examples, and avoid repeating previous points.

例: I like to eat fruits as snacks because they are healthy and refreshing, especially when I am hungry between meals.

× Generally, I don't like to eat. The snacks, but when I feel hungry and there's no alternatives, I. Take the snacks.

✓ Generally, I don't like to eat snacks, but when I feel hungry and there are no alternatives, I take the snacks.

The original sentence has incorrect sentence breaks and misplaced periods, causing confusion. Also, 'there's no alternatives' should be 'there are no alternatives' due to plural 'alternatives'. The sentence should be combined properly for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I don't. I think it is not good for our hailed because and market there are on high. On a hilly, what is not good for our health is about level in the market, so it's better to use a meals.

✓ I don't think it is good for our health because the market has high prices. What is not good for our health is the high level in the market, so it's better to eat meals.

The original sentence contains fragmented sentences and unclear pronoun references. 'I don't.' is incomplete and should be combined with the next sentence. 'Our hailed' is a typo for 'our health'. The sentence structure is confusing and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× No, I didn't. Prame from childhood. Do it. Until now I recommended to eat the males. Over the snacks because my mother's always aware about Dewey. The better pools, which is good for our health.

✓ No, I didn't. From childhood until now, I have been recommended to eat meals over snacks because my mother is always aware of what is better, which is good for our health.

The original sentence has multiple errors including incorrect tense usage, unclear words ('Prame', 'Dewey', 'better pools'), and sentence fragments. The correction uses present perfect tense to indicate an action continuing until now and clarifies the meaning.

× Generally, I like to eat fruit. In case of emergency. I already mentioned that I don't like to eat the snacks.

✓ Generally, I like to eat fruit. In case of emergency, I already mentioned that I don't like to eat snacks.

The phrase 'the snacks' is incorrect because 'snacks' is a plural noun used in general sense and does not require 'the'. Also, the sentence fragment 'In case of emergency.' should be connected with the following sentence for clarity.