Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达不清晰，存在语法错误和重复，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并且用更自然的表达方式回答问题。

例: I usually eat snacks when I watch soccer games on TV with my family. I try to choose healthy snacks and avoid junk food as much as possible.

提案: 回答内容不清晰，语法错误较多，表达混乱。建议用简单明了的句子表达观点，并具体说明如何选择健康的零食。

例: I think some snacks are unhealthy because they contain additives. Therefore, I always read the labels carefully and avoid snacks with chemicals.

提案: 回答非常混乱，语法和表达错误严重，难以理解。建议用简单句子直接回答问题，并补充具体细节。

例: No, I did not often eat snacks when I was young because my family did not have much money. Sometimes my friends shared snacks with me, which I enjoyed very much.

提案: 表达不够清晰，语法错误较多，句子结构混乱。建议用简单句子表达喜欢的零食，并说明原因。

例: I like traditional snacks, especially those from Beijing. They are delicious and remind me of the local culture and history.

× but snacks is.

✓ but snacks are.

这里的'snacks'是复数形式，谓语动词应使用复数形式'are'，而不是单数形式'is'。

× the sum of snacks could be a junk foods that put the Hillary influences on my house.

✓ some snacks could be junk food that has a harmful influence on my health.

'sum of snacks'表达不准确，应为'some snacks'；'junk foods'应为不可数名词'junk food'；'Hillary influences'应为'harmful influences'；'on my house'应为'on my health'。

× I often read the the descripcion of the snacks and avoid food additives and some the chemico items in need.

✓ I often read the description of the snacks and avoid food additives and some chemical items.

'descripcion'拼写错误，应为'description'；'chemico'应为'chemical'；'in need'用法不当，应去掉。

× No, where was the young I really I I really I hate her snacks because I have no more money to spend the untitled snacks at weekend by apparent our friend give me a chance to enjoying the delicious next side the family.

✓ No, when I was young, I really hated snacks because I had no money to buy snacks on weekends. Fortunately, our friends gave me a chance to enjoy delicious snacks with their family.

原句结构混乱，时态错误，表达不清。需要调整句子结构，使用正确的时态和表达方式。

× In my altonaer, I adored the traditional snacks, such as the Beijing traditional snacks.

✓ In my opinion, I adore traditional snacks, such as Beijing traditional snacks.

'altonaer'拼写错误，应为'opinion'；时态应与上下文一致，使用一般现在时'adore'。

× That is not only sort of the food but also that in walls.

✓ That is not only a kind of food but also part of the culture.

'not only... but also'结构使用不当，'sort of the food'应为'a kind of food'，'that in walls'表达不清，应改为'part of the culture'。

× The history of the location, that gives me a chance to remember that, really.

✓ The history of the place gives me a chance to remember it.

句子结构不完整，重复使用'that'导致表达混乱，应简化句子结构。