Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误，表达不够自然，且句子结构混乱。建议简化句子，使用正确的时态和语法，并且避免冗余。可以先直接回答问题，然后用一两句具体说明时间和场合。

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening when I watch movies or play mobile games. This is because these activities are relaxing and I like to have a small treat during that time.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不清晰，逻辑不连贯。建议先明确表达观点，然后用简单明了的理由支持观点，避免使用不准确或模糊的词汇。

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat. Our daily meals already provide the necessary nutrients, so snacks are not essential.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复，句子不够流畅。建议使用完整句子，避免重复，清晰表达时间和习惯。

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially during primary school. After classes, I usually went to a shop near my school to buy something to eat.

提案: 回答表达不够连贯，句子结构有误。建议先直接回答喜欢的零食，然后用一两句说明原因，注意时态和连贯性。

例: I don't eat many snacks, but my favorite snack is cookies. My grandma often made cookies for me when I was young, so I have enjoyed them since then.

× I seldom in snacks.

✓ I seldom eat snacks.

句子缺少谓语动词，导致结构不完整。应补充动词"eat"，使句子完整。

× So just play some mobile phone games which is don't need me to do a lot of things to move the characters in the games.

✓ So I just play some mobile phone games which don't need me to do a lot of things to move the characters in the games.

句子缺少主语"I"，且"is"与复数主语"games"不一致，应改为"don't"。

× I agree that the mills is already fit the old things you need in daily life for the bodies so I the snacks is not. Essential for. One Peoples.

✓ I agree that the meals already fit the things you need in daily life for the body, so snacks are not essential for people.

"mills"应为"meals"，"is"与复数主语不符，应改为"are"，"One Peoples"用法错误，应为"people"。

× Yes, I often is.

✓ Yes, I often do.

"is"用法错误，主语是第一人称单数，应使用助动词"do"来构成肯定句。

× Next one was young.

✓ When I was young.

表达过去时间应使用"when I was young"，原句结构不完整且用词错误。

× After after I.

✓ After I finished class,

句子不完整，缺少谓语动词，需补充完整表达。

× I bought something to eat every day.

✓ I bought something to eat every day.

句子无语法错误，符合语境。

× Since I don't eat much snacks, I suppose I my favorite snacks is cookie.

✓ Since I don't eat many snacks, I suppose my favorite snack is cookie.

"much"用于不可数名词，"snacks"为可数名词，应使用"many"；"snacks is"主谓不一致，应为单数"snack is"。

× Because my grandma often made some cookies for me to eat. While I was young, so I. Have that habit. Until now.

✓ Because my grandma often made some cookies for me to eat when I was young, so I have had that habit until now.

句子断裂，时态混乱，应合并句子并使用现在完成时表达持续的习惯。