Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific details. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon when I feel hungry, especially while watching a movie or studying. For example, I like to have some nuts or fruit during these times.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clear structure. Provide a direct response to the question, then explain your opinion with specific examples. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I think some snacks are healthy, like nuts and fruits, but others, such as chips or fast food, are not good for health because they contain a lot of salt and fat.

提案: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Give a direct answer and support it with specific details or examples. Keep your sentences concise and connected.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially sweets like cookies and candies. I enjoyed them after school or during family gatherings.

提案: Your answer is confusing and does not directly answer the question. Clearly state your favourite snacks and provide reasons or examples. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: I like to eat chocolate and fruit as snacks because they satisfy my sweet tooth and are easy to eat. My parents often give me these snacks after school.

× I mostly not getting that next I'm usually eating nutmeg when I was sometime in leveling.

✓ I mostly do not get that. Next, I usually eat nutmeg when I am leveling sometimes.

The original sentence has multiple sentence structure errors, including missing auxiliary verbs and unclear phrasing. 'I mostly not getting' is incorrect; it should be 'I mostly do not get' to form a proper negative present tense. Also, 'I'm usually eating nutmeg when I was sometime in leveling' mixes tenses and is unclear. Correcting to 'I usually eat nutmeg when I am leveling sometimes' aligns the tense and clarifies meaning.

× Sometimes I'm watching a picture.

✓ Sometimes I watch a picture.

The phrase 'watching a picture' is unusual and likely incorrect. The present continuous 'I'm watching' is acceptable if the action is ongoing, but 'watching a picture' is not a common expression. Changing to 'I watch a picture' uses simple present tense for habitual action, but the phrase itself may need clarification depending on intended meaning.

× I'm feeling hungry. That time I usually.

✓ When I feel hungry, I usually eat snacks.

The original sentence 'That time I usually.' is incomplete and lacks a verb. Combining the two sentences into 'When I feel hungry, I usually eat snacks.' provides a complete and grammatically correct sentence expressing habitual action.

× Something that's healthy or something makes us not healthy like in a knot and drive through sorry healthy for help.

✓ Some snacks are healthy, and some make us unhealthy, like fast food from drive-throughs.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'In a knot and drive through sorry healthy for help' is nonsensical. Rewriting to 'Some snacks are healthy, and some make us unhealthy, like fast food from drive-throughs.' clarifies the meaning and corrects sentence structure.

× For example eating some chips like. Morehead.

✓ For example, eating some chips is not healthy.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'is not healthy' completes the thought and corrects sentence structure.

× Yes, 'cause I'm off and it tracks when I was.

✓ Yes, because I often ate snacks when I was young.

The original sentence is unclear and contains incorrect phrases like 'I'm off and it tracks.' Rewriting to 'Yes, because I often ate snacks when I was young.' provides clarity and correct tense usage.

× Yeah, yeah. I think it's next.

✓ Yes, yes. I think it's snacks.

The phrase 'I think it's next' is likely a mishearing or mispronunciation of 'snacks.' Correcting to 'I think it's snacks.' makes the sentence meaningful.

× Anna, somebody taking it some chocolate?

✓ Sometimes, somebody gives me some chocolate.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Rewriting to 'Sometimes, somebody gives me some chocolate.' corrects sentence structure and clarifies meaning.

× And I'm not certain. Which is giving him my parents after that.

✓ And I'm not certain who gives it to me, maybe my parents after that.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Rewriting to 'And I'm not certain who gives it to me, maybe my parents after that.' corrects sentence structure and clarifies meaning.