Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법적 오류가 많으며, 중복 표현이 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하고, 연결어를 사용하여 논리적인 흐름을 만들어야 합니다. 예를 들어, 'Nowadays, I usually avoid eating snacks because I am on a diet. However, when I feel stressed, I sometimes eat snacks repeatedly, which is unhealthy.'와 같이 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: Nowadays, I usually avoid eating snacks because I am on a diet. However, when I feel stressed, I sometimes eat snacks repeatedly, which is unhealthy.

提案: 답변이 명확하지 않고 문법적 오류와 불필요한 단어가 포함되어 있습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고 구체적인 이유를 제시하며, 연결어를 사용해 문장을 자연스럽게 이어야 합니다. 예를 들어, 'No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many snacks contain high calories and fats, which can lead to weight gain.'라고 말할 수 있습니다.

例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy because many snacks contain high calories and fats, which can lead to weight gain.

提案: 답변이 다소 어색하고 문법적 오류가 있습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 구체적인 상황과 감정을 연결어를 사용해 자연스럽게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'When I was young, I often ate snacks as a reward from my parents when I got good scores, so I was always happy.'라고 표현할 수 있습니다.

例: When I was young, I often ate snacks as a reward from my parents when I got good scores, so I was always happy.

提案: 답변이 불완전하고 문장이 끊어져 있어 자연스럽지 않습니다. 질문에 직접 답하고, 구체적인 예시를 연결어와 함께 자연스럽게 나열하는 연습이 필요합니다. 예를 들어, 'I usually prefer snacks such as potato chips, chocolates, or fries.'라고 말할 수 있습니다.

例: I usually prefer snacks such as potato chips, chocolates, or fries.

× Nowadays I avoid eating snacks because I'm on diet.

✓ Nowadays I avoid eating snacks because I'm on a diet.

The phrase 'on diet' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'on a diet' which requires the indefinite article 'a'. This is an article error (ID 22).

× Nowadays I gained a lot.

✓ Nowadays I have gained a lot.

The use of 'gained' in simple past is incorrect here because 'nowadays' indicates a present time frame. Present perfect tense 'have gained' is appropriate to express an action that has relevance to the present.

× But when I'm really stressed for I eat again, it again it again.

✓ But when I'm really stressed, I eat again and again.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and repetition. The corrected sentence uses proper conjunction and removes redundancy for clarity.

× So I avoid eating snakes.

✓ So I avoid eating snacks.

The word 'snakes' is a misspelling of 'snacks'. This is a vocabulary error but can be considered under singular/plural confusion due to similar spelling.

× No, I don't, I don't think. It's not healthy for eating snacks.

✓ No, I don't think so. It's not healthy to eat snacks.

The phrase 'for eating snacks' is incorrect; the correct form is 'to eat snacks'. This is an incorrect use of prepositions (ID 11).

× BIC, AWS. In these days. There are many people who are. A fat because of a lot of snacks. Hamburgers or.

✓ These days, many people are overweight because of eating a lot of snacks, hamburgers, and so on.

The original sentences are fragmented and unclear. The correction combines ideas into a coherent sentence with proper structure.

× When I was young I often it ate snake because it was kind of gifted.

✓ When I was young, I often ate snacks because they were kind of gifts.

The sentence has incorrect word order and singular/plural errors. 'It ate snake' is incorrect; 'I often ate snacks' is correct. Also, 'gifted' should be 'gifts' as plural noun.

× When I got a good score ascore my parents gave me snacks as a gift.

✓ When I got a good score, my parents gave me snacks as a gift.

Typo 'ascore' corrected to 'a score'. The rest is correct.

× So it was really good things that I ate. Snack.

✓ So it was really good to eat snacks.

The original sentence is awkward and fragmented. The correction provides a natural sentence structure.

× I usually prefer to eat snacks. Such as? Potato chips or. Some chocolates. Or. Tries, not. That those kinds of snacks.

✓ I usually prefer to eat snacks such as potato chips, some chocolates, or fries, not those other kinds of snacks.

The sentence has fragmented structure and misspelling 'tries' should be 'fries'. The correction combines fragments into a coherent sentence and corrects spelling.