Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 명확하지 않아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 구성하며, 스트레스를 받을 때 간식을 먹는다는 주제를 중심으로 자연스럽게 표현하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I usually eat snacks when I feel very stressed because I am on a diet. Sometimes, I can't control myself and end up eating many kinds of snacks repeatedly.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 완성되지 않아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 간식 섭취가 건강에 좋지 않다는 의견을 명확히 표현하고, 다이어트 이유를 구체적으로 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: No, I don't think eating snacks is healthy. I am on a diet to stay fit and healthy because I have gained weight over the past few years.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 매우 부정확하고 내용이 혼란스러워 이해하기 어렵습니다. 어린 시절 간식을 자주 먹었던 경험을 간단하고 명확하게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. My parents gave us snacks as a reward when we did well at school or behaved nicely.

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 단어 선택이 혼란스럽습니다. 좋아하는 간식과 음료를 명확하게 표현하고, 간식을 먹는 상황을 자연스럽게 설명하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: My favorite snack is potato chips, and sometimes I like dried calamari. I also enjoy drinking beer occasionally. I especially like eating chips while driving in the car.

× Are usually is next now when I'm really stressful because I'm on diet nowadays, but when I'm really stressed for I can't control myself.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I'm really stressed because I'm on a diet nowadays, but when I'm really stressed, I can't control myself.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and verb usage for present tense. 'Are usually is next now' is incorrect; it should be 'I usually eat snacks'. Also, 'I'm on diet' needs an article 'a' before 'diet'. The sentence should be structured clearly to express habitual action in present tense.

× Many kinds of snacks I just to eat.

✓ I just eat many kinds of snacks.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing verb form. 'Many kinds of snacks' is plural and correct, but the sentence lacks a proper verb phrase. The corrected sentence places the verb 'eat' properly and forms a complete sentence.

× It again. It again.

✓ I eat them again and again.

The original sentence fragments 'It again. It again.' are incomplete and unclear. The correction forms a complete sentence expressing repetition, which fits the intended meaning.

× Absolutely, I don't think so because eating snake is unhealthy.

✓ Absolutely, I don't think so because eating snacks is unhealthy.

The word 'snake' is a typo for 'snack'. Also, the modal verb usage is correct but the noun needs correction. The sentence structure is fine otherwise.

× I am on diet to make. Correct or comfortable fit for my age but I gained a lot in a few years.

✓ I am on a diet to be correct or comfortably fit for my age, but I have gained a lot in a few years.

'On diet' needs the article 'a'. 'Make correct or comfortable fit' is awkward; 'to be correct or comfortably fit' is better. Also, present perfect 'have gained' is appropriate for recent past action continuing to present.

× That's why I'm on diet and I.

✓ That's why I'm on a diet.

The original sentence is incomplete and ends abruptly. The correction completes the sentence properly.

× Yes I too when I was young.

✓ Yes, I did too when I was young.

The original sentence lacks the auxiliary verb 'did' needed for past tense in affirmative short answers. 'I too' is incomplete without 'did'.

× I is next very often because my parents are raised gifted a gave us as a gift to win.

✓ I ate snacks very often because my parents raised us and gave us snacks as a gift when we did something good.

The original sentence has multiple errors: 'I is next' is incorrect; 'I ate snacks' is correct past tense. 'Parents are raised gifted a gave us' is incorrect; corrected to 'parents raised us and gave us snacks as a gift'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and correct tense.

× We did something good or some some we get some score good scored a day or escape for us snakes as a gift.

✓ We did something good or got good scores, and we received snacks as a gift.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. The correction simplifies and clarifies the meaning with proper sentence structure and verb forms.

× My favorite snake is.

✓ My favorite snack is potato chips.

'Snake' is a typo for 'snack'. The sentence is incomplete; the correction completes it with the favorite snack.

× Potato chips this the best for me and sometimes calamari.

✓ Potato chips are the best for me, and sometimes I eat calamari.

The original sentence lacks proper verb and article usage. 'Potato chips this the best' is incorrect; 'Potato chips are the best' is correct. Added 'I eat' for clarity.

× Dries columnaris as well and sometimes drinking beer as well.

✓ Dried calamari as well, and sometimes I drink beer as well.

'Dries columnaris' is a misspelling of 'dried calamari'. The sentence lacks subject and verb for 'drinking beer'; corrected to 'I drink beer'.

× All but the most popular thing is. Eatings chips in car.

✓ But the most popular thing is eating chips in the car.

The original sentence is fragmented and has incorrect verb form 'Eatings'. Corrected to a complete sentence with gerund 'eating' and added article 'the' before 'car'.