Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and lacks coherence. Try to start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question, then add supporting details using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases like 'we are' and 'different teas'.

例: I usually eat snacks twice a week because eating only main meals can be boring. Therefore, I like to have snacks to add some variety to my diet.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Please try to give a clear opinion first, then explain with specific reasons. Use linking words like 'however' or 'but' to connect ideas. Avoid unclear words and phrases such as 'snakes', 'CS', and 'Where?'.

例: I think eating snacks can be healthy or unhealthy depending on the type. However, if I limit myself to eating snacks only twice a week, it should not harm my health according to doctors' advice.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many mistakes. Please answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then explain with supporting details. Avoid confusing words and phrases like 'Citrix subtracted' and 'danced about'.

例: I did not eat many snacks when I was young because my parents were very strict about my health. They did not allow me to eat snacks often.

提案: Your answer is somewhat understandable but has grammatical errors and unclear phrases like 'T stand'. Try to give a clear topic sentence and explain why you like those snacks using correct vocabulary and linking words.

例: Nowadays, I like to eat supreme rolls, Manchurian, and burgers because I enjoy their taste and the crispiness they have.

× Twice a week I often eat snacks because we are.

✓ I often eat snacks twice a week because we are.

The sentence has incorrect word order and an incomplete clause 'because we are'. The phrase 'because we are' is incomplete and unclear. The sentence should be reordered for clarity and completeness.

× Only eating the whole food can be boring for me, so to get some different teas so I usually eat snacks.

✓ Only eating whole foods can be boring for me, so to get some variety, I usually eat snacks.

The sentence has redundancy and awkward phrasing with 'so to get some different teas so'. It should be simplified and clarified for better understanding.

× A little, some of these snakes are very healthy but the other one are some dangerous to my health.

✓ A little, some of these snacks are very healthy but the others are dangerous to my health.

The word 'snakes' is a typo for 'snacks'. Also, 'the other one are' is incorrect; it should be 'the others are' to agree in number.

× But with the limitation we can not get any disease from that kind of snacks.

✓ But with limitation, we cannot get any disease from that kind of snack.

'The limitation' is incorrect; 'limitation' without 'the' is better here. Also, 'that kind of snacks' should be 'that kind of snack' because 'kind' is singular.

× So that's why I also eat snags only twice a week and doctors also CS that eating only for one or two days. Where?

✓ So that's why I also eat snacks only twice a week, and doctors also say that eating snacks only once or twice a week is fine.

The sentence is unclear and contains typos like 'snags' and 'CS'. It needs restructuring and correction for clarity.

× Well, I don't think so you sleep so many snacks when I was young because my parents are very Citrix subtracted or he they always danced about my health, so that's why they were not allowed me to allow this to me aloud to me eat snacks.

✓ Well, I don't think I ate many snacks when I was young because my parents were very strict and they always cared about my health, so that's why they did not allow me to eat snacks.

The sentence has multiple errors including incorrect verb forms, typos ('Citrix subtracted', 'danced'), and incorrect phrasing. It needs correction in past tense and clarity.

× Basically nowadays I like to eat supreme rolls, Manchurian and some burgers because I like them because of their T stand.

✓ Basically, nowadays I like to eat supreme rolls, Manchurian, and some burgers because I like them because of their taste.

The word 'T stand' is a typo for 'taste'. Also, commas are needed for list clarity.

× Some crispiness in that things.

✓ They have some crispiness in those things.

The phrase is incomplete and uses incorrect demonstrative pronoun 'that' instead of 'those' for plural. The sentence needs a subject and verb for completeness.