Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer does not directly respond to the question. Try to answer the question clearly and naturally by stating when you usually eat snacks. Avoid repeating the examiner's question and use correct grammar.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon when I feel a little hungry but not ready for a full meal.

提案: Your answer is relevant and mostly clear, but try to use more formal language and avoid contractions like 'gonna'. Also, add linking words to improve coherence.

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they are usually high in calories and do not make you feel full, so they can lead to overeating.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and is unclear. Use the past tense correctly and provide a clear response with supporting details. Avoid vague phrases like 'expect more usually'.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially sweets and chips, more frequently than I do now.

提案: Your answer is understandable but repetitive and slightly unclear. Try to avoid repeating words and be more specific about the snacks you like. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I really enjoy chocolate, including chocolate bars and chocolate-flavoured snacks like pancakes.

× Are you gonna eat snacks when I want to eat something but I am not so hungry?

✓ Do you eat snacks when I want to eat something but I am not so hungry?

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'are you gonna' (future tense) when the question is about a habitual action. The correct tense here is present simple to indicate usual behaviour. 'Are you gonna' is informal and refers to future intention, which does not fit the context.

× I will say no because snacks are always high calorie and it is not gonna make you feel full so I think it is not healthy.

✓ I would say no because snacks are always high in calories and they do not make you feel full, so I think they are not healthy.

'I will say no' is less appropriate than 'I would say no' when giving an opinion. 'Gonna' is informal and should be replaced with 'do not' for clarity. Also, 'high calorie' should be 'high in calories' to be grammatically correct. 'It' should be 'they' to agree with the plural noun 'snacks'.

× Yeah, I often E snacks when I were young and I expect more usually when I am now.

✓ Yeah, I often ate snacks when I was young and I eat more usually now.

'E' is incorrect and should be 'ate' (past tense of 'eat'). 'I were' is incorrect; the correct past tense is 'I was'. 'I expect more usually when I am now' is awkward and incorrect; it should be 'I eat more usually now' to indicate current habitual action.

× I like chocolate a lot and also I like all all the chocolate stuff like chocolate bar or chocolate flavored like a pancake.

✓ I like chocolate a lot and also I like all the chocolate stuff like chocolate bars or chocolate-flavoured things like pancakes.

The repetition 'all all' is an error and should be 'all'. 'Chocolate bar' should be plural 'chocolate bars' to match the quantifier 'all'. 'Chocolate flavored like a pancake' is unclear; it should be 'chocolate-flavoured things like pancakes' to clarify meaning and correct adjective use.