Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有些重复和语法错误，建议简洁明了地表达时间和原因，避免多余的词汇。可以使用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I usually eat snacks at night because I often study or play video games then. Eating snacks helps me stay focused during these activities.

提案: 回答中表达不清且有语法错误，建议直接表达观点并用具体理由支持，避免模糊和矛盾的表述。

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because most snacks contain a lot of sugar and fat, which can harm my health if I eat them often.

提案: 回答较完整，但有重复和语法问题。建议简洁表达并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I didn't eat many snacks when I was young because my mother often told me not to. Instead, she cooked delicious meals for me, so I preferred eating those.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和不完整的词汇，建议使用完整句子并具体说明喜欢的零食和原因。

例: I like to eat grapes and ice cream, especially ice cream in summer because it helps me cool down. I also enjoy eating popcorn when I watch movies.

× Well, I like to eat some snack like at night, yeah, because sometimes I, I need to study until night and, and also sometimes I would just play some video games and of course at night.

✓ Well, I like to eat some snacks at night, yeah, because sometimes I need to study until night and also sometimes I just play some video games, of course at night.

The word 'snack' should be plural 'snacks' because it refers to an unspecified quantity of food items eaten between meals. Using the singular form here is incorrect when referring to multiple items or an unspecified amount.

× So yeah, I'd like to eat some snacks when I, when I'm doing something like that, yeah.

✓ So yeah, I'd like to eat some snacks when I'm doing something like that, yeah.

The sentence is mostly correct, but removing the repeated 'when I' improves clarity and flow. The plural 'snacks' is correctly used here.

× Absolutely not because, you know, snacks themselves are quite unhealthy to two people and also besides like a Julie is snacks at night.

✓ Absolutely not because, you know, snacks themselves are quite unhealthy to people and also besides, eating snacks at night is not good.

The phrase 'unhealthy to two people' is incorrect; it should be 'unhealthy to people' to generalize. Also, 'a Julie is snacks' is unclear and likely a mishearing or typo; it should be corrected to 'eating snacks'. Quantifiers and expressions need to be clear and appropriate.

× So you know, eating things are nice are quite a healthy.

✓ So you know, eating these things is not very healthy.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. 'Eating things are nice are quite a healthy' is incorrect in structure and word choice. It should be rephrased to express that eating such things is unhealthy.

× So yeah, absolutely is quite healthy for me to eat some snacks.

✓ So yeah, absolutely it is not healthy for me to eat some snacks.

The original sentence contradicts the intended meaning. 'Absolutely is quite healthy' should be 'absolutely it is not healthy' to match the context. Also, 'some snacks' is acceptable here.

× Well, I don't think so because at that time my mother is, she always told me not to eat some snacks and she she will always cook me some, some delicious stuff.

✓ Well, I don't think so because at that time my mother always told me not to eat snacks and she always cooked me some delicious stuff.

The phrase 'not to eat some snacks' is better as 'not to eat snacks' for general advice. Also, 'she she will always cook' should be 'she always cooked' to maintain past tense consistency.

× So I will instead of eating snacks, I'd like to eat some, something that my mother made.

✓ So instead of eating snacks, I liked to eat something that my mother made.

The sentence mixes future and past tenses incorrectly. Since the context is past habits, 'I will' should be 'I liked' to maintain past tense consistency.

× So yeah, at that time I, I don't think that I eat much snacks.

✓ So yeah, at that time I don't think that I ate many snacks.

'Much snacks' is incorrect; 'many snacks' is the correct quantifier for countable nouns. Also, 'eat' should be past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame.

× Well, I'd like to eat some grapes or some ice cream.

✓ Well, I'd like to eat some grapes or some ice cream.

This sentence is correct; 'grapes' is plural and 'ice cream' is uncountable, both used appropriately with 'some'.

× Yeah, especially ice cream because that's my favorite snack an I will eat it every summer.

✓ Yeah, especially ice cream because that's my favorite snack and I eat it every summer.

The conjunction 'an' should be 'and'. Also, 'will eat' suggests future, but since this is a habitual action, present simple 'eat' is more appropriate.

× Yeah, because it's quite HAWT in city that I live in.

✓ Yeah, because it's quite hot in the city that I live in.

'HAWT' is a misspelling of 'hot'. Also, 'in city that I live in' should be 'in the city that I live in' to include the definite article.

× So actually I was just easier to to become cooler.

✓ So actually it was just easier to become cooler.

The original sentence is missing the subject 'it' and has an extra 'to'. The correct phrase is 'it was easier to become cooler'.

× And also I will eat some ***** when I just watch some movies.

✓ And also I eat some snacks when I watch movies.

The word '*****' is unclear but likely refers to 'snacks'. 'Will eat' suggests future, but habitual action should use present simple 'eat'. Also, 'just watch some movies' should be 'watch movies' for natural phrasing.