Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a clear and direct response with proper sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid redundancy. For example, say when you eat snacks and why, in a simple and natural way.

例: I usually eat snacks after breakfast and lunch, especially when I have a lot of work or study to do. Snacking helps me stay energized during busy times.

提案: Your answer is confusing and lacks clear structure. Try to directly answer the question first, then explain with specific examples. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect your ideas. Also, avoid vague words like 'etc.'

例: No, I don't think eating snacks like instant noodles is healthy because they contain a lot of salt and preservatives. So, I am trying to choose healthier snacks like fruits or nuts now.

提案: Your answer is somewhat understandable but has grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific examples. Use past tense correctly and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I loved food. For example, I used to ask for ice cream and chips as treats during my childhood.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many errors. Try to clearly state your favorite snacks and explain why you like them. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid incomplete sentences.

例: My favorite snacks are instant noodles and ice cream. I especially like to eat them when I am in a bad mood because they make me feel better.

× I am really is very foodie person so I it's next now within it specially after breakfast and after lunch during my laser time when I have so much work load and two to study I snacking a lot.

✓ I am really a very foodie person, so I eat snacks now, especially after breakfast and after lunch during my leisure time when I have so much workload and need to study, I snack a lot.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and missing articles. 'Is' is unnecessary after 'I am really'. 'Foodie person' needs an article 'a'. 'It's next now within it' is unclear and corrected to 'I eat snacks now'. 'Laser time' is a typo for 'leisure time'. 'Work load' should be one word 'workload'. 'Two to study' should be 'need to study'. 'I snacking a lot' should be 'I snack a lot'. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× No that's next. I eat for example chiefs noodles that are not healthy at all eyes next during my break. So it's important them to be healthy like now it's foods etc. I am trying to do the snacks very healthy now it is.

✓ No, that's snacks. I eat, for example, instant noodles that are not healthy at all during my break. So it's important for them to be healthy, like healthy foods. I am trying to make my snacks very healthy now.

The sentence has incorrect pronoun use and unclear phrases. 'That's next' is corrected to 'that's snacks'. 'Chiefs noodles' is likely 'instant noodles'. 'Eyes next' is unclear and removed. 'It's important them to be healthy' corrected to 'it's important for them to be healthy'. 'Like now it's foods etc.' is unclear and changed to 'like healthy foods'. 'I am trying to do the snacks very healthy now it is' corrected to 'I am trying to make my snacks very healthy now' for clarity and grammar.

× As I said, I am a big foodie, so I. It snacks during my childhood. For example, I asked for ice cream chips in my childhood. So yes, I often ate snacks when I am young.

✓ As I said, I am a big foodie, so I ate snacks during my childhood. For example, I asked for ice cream and chips in my childhood. So yes, I often ate snacks when I was young.

The sentence has incorrect verb tense and incomplete sentence. 'I. It snacks' is corrected to 'I ate snacks'. 'Asked for ice cream chips' is corrected to 'asked for ice cream and chips'. 'When I am young' should be past tense 'when I was young' to match the past context.

× Does next I'd like to eat the most is has to be instant noodles and ice cream. They gave me a. Especially when I am in the mood, I'm in a bad mood or I'm said I think to eat more of them, they give me please.

✓ The snacks I'd like to eat the most have to be instant noodles and ice cream. They give me pleasure, especially when I am in a bad mood or sad. I tend to eat more of them because they make me feel better.

The sentence has singular/plural confusion and unclear phrases. 'Does next' corrected to 'The snacks'. 'Is has to be' corrected to 'have to be' to agree with plural 'snacks'. 'They gave me a' is incomplete and corrected to 'They give me pleasure'. 'I'm said' corrected to 'sad'. 'I think to eat more of them, they give me please' corrected to 'I tend to eat more of them because they make me feel better' for clarity and grammar.