Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear. Avoid unclear phrases like 'sings through all the time that I'm hungry'. Instead, explain your habits simply and directly, and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I usually eat snacks between lunch and dinner because I often feel hungry during that time. Therefore, having a snack helps me stay energized until my next meal.

提案: Improve clarity and vocabulary. Use correct phrases like 'depends on' instead of 'bands on'. Also, use linking words like 'however' to contrast ideas and be more specific about why some snacks are healthy or not.

例: To be honest, it depends on the type of snacks I eat. For example, fruits are healthy and beneficial, however, eating chips or drinking Coca-Cola is unhealthy because they contain a lot of sugar and fat.

提案: Focus on correct verb tenses and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words like 'not only... but also' properly and explain your opinion with reasons.

例: Yes, when I was young, I used to eat snacks very often. Not only once a day, but sometimes two or three times. I think this was unhealthy, but now I am more careful about what and how often I eat snacks.

提案: Use correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Avoid unclear words like 'gypsy' and say 'snacks' instead of 'as next'. Also, explain your preference clearly and use linking words to show contrast.

例: Unfortunately, I like to eat unhealthy snacks like chips and drink artificial juices because I enjoy their taste. However, I know it would be healthier if I chose fruits instead.

× I usually eat snacks between lunch meal or the dinner meals.

✓ I usually eat snacks between lunch and dinner meals.

The preposition 'between' should be followed by 'and' to correctly link two items. Using 'or' here is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'between lunch and dinner meals.'

× snacks is useful for me.

✓ snacks are useful for me.

The subject 'snacks' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× I think it is the bands on what kind of snacks that I eat.

✓ I think it depends on what kind of snacks I eat.

The phrase 'the bands on' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'depends on' to express conditionality.

× If I eat fruits for example or something healthy it could be useful.

✓ If I eat fruits, for example, or something healthy, it could be useful.

Commas are needed to set off the phrase 'for example' as an interrupter, improving clarity.

× But if I eat the chips Iora a Coca-Cola, that's not useful.

✓ But if I eat chips or drink a Coca-Cola, that's not useful.

The article 'the' before 'chips' is unnecessary here. Also, 'Iora' seems to be a typo for 'or'. The correct phrase is 'chips or drink a Coca-Cola.'

× Yes, when I was young I actually eat snacks a through all the time, Not only one time on the day, but it could be twice or three times.

✓ Yes, when I was young I actually ate snacks throughout all the time, not only once a day, but it could be twice or three times.

The verb 'eat' should be in past tense 'ate' to match the past time frame. 'Through all the time' should be 'throughout all the time' for correct expression. 'Not only one time on the day' should be 'not only once a day' for natural phrasing.

× Unfortunately I like to eat unhealthy as next like gypsy or other artificial juice because I like them but I know it could be healthier if I eat fruits.

✓ Unfortunately, I like to eat unhealthy snacks like chips or drink other artificial juices because I like them, but I know it would be healthier if I ate fruits.

'Unhealthy as next like gypsy' is incorrect and unclear. It should be 'unhealthy snacks like chips.' Also, 'could be healthier if I eat fruits' should be 'would be healthier if I ate fruits' to express hypothetical condition in past tense.