Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be improved by correcting grammar and making the response more natural and concise. For example, use 'after I come home from work' instead of 'after I came from work', and combine sentences to avoid redundancy. Also, specify the types of fruits or sandwiches to add detail.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon after I come home from work. I prefer easy-to-prepare foods that satisfy my hunger, such as apples or a turkey sandwich.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains some unclear parts and grammatical errors. Avoid mentioning unclear or incorrect health effects (like UTI) without explanation. Use linking words to improve coherence and be more specific about why certain snacks are healthy or unhealthy.

例: I think it depends on the type of snacks. For example, fruits are healthy because they provide vitamins, but eating junk foods like chips regularly can be harmful due to high fat and salt content.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be clearer and more natural. Avoid repeating 'yes I did' and improve sentence structure. Provide more specific details about the types of snacks or reasons for snacking.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because my body needed extra energy to grow. I usually enjoyed fruits and cookies as snacks.

提案: Your answer shows good content but has grammatical errors and could be more concise. Use past tense consistently when talking about the past, and clarify your ideas. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: When I was younger, I often ate junk foods like Lays and Cheetos. However, as I grew older, I started preferring healthier snacks such as fruits, vegetables, sandwiches, and sometimes pizza because I think our taste buds change over time.

× I look for food that are easily to prepare.

✓ I look for food that is easy to prepare.

The subject 'food' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, 'easily' is an adverb, but here an adjective 'easy' is needed to describe 'to prepare'.

× And could satisfy my hunger like fruits or sandwich.

✓ And could satisfy my hunger like fruits or sandwiches.

The word 'sandwich' should be plural 'sandwiches' to match the plural 'fruits' and to indicate more than one item as snacks.

× So for example if its fruits I think it's good for the body but if you're going to always eat junk foods like Lisanne, Cheetos, I think that's not good for your body 'cause it can cause UTI in other.

✓ So for example, if it's fruits, I think it's good for the body, but if you're always going to eat junk foods like Lays, Cheetos, I think that's not good for your body because it can cause UTI in others.

The pronoun 'its' should be 'it's' (it is). 'Lisanne' seems to be a typo for 'Lays'. Also, 'in other' should be 'in others' to correctly refer to other people. The sentence also needs commas for clarity.

× I usually eat snacks in the afternoon after I came from work.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the afternoon after I come from work.

The question is about current habits, so present tense 'come' should be used instead of past tense 'came'.

× I remember I always have snacks in my mouth because probably we are growing up in our body needs food to grow.

✓ I remember I always had snacks in my mouth because probably when we are growing up, our body needs food to grow.

The phrase 'I always have' should be past tense 'I always had' to match 'I remember'. Also, 'in our body needs food to grow' is incorrect; it should be 'when we are growing up, our body needs food to grow' for clarity and correctness.

× When I was younger I'm always eating junk foods like Lays, Cheetos but now when I grew older I am more into fruits and vegetables or sandwich or pizza.

✓ When I was younger, I was always eating junk foods like Lays, Cheetos, but now that I have grown older, I am more into fruits, vegetables, sandwiches, or pizza.

The phrase 'I'm always eating' should be past continuous 'I was always eating' to match 'When I was younger'. 'When I grew older' should be 'now that I have grown older' for correct tense and meaning. Also, 'sandwich' should be plural 'sandwiches' to match the list.

× I don't know my I think our taste buds change as time.

✓ I don't know, but I think our taste buds change over time.

The phrase 'my I think' is incorrect; it should be 'but I think'. Also, 'as time' should be 'over time' for correct expression.