Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: คำตอบควรชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติมากขึ้น โดยหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่จำเป็น เช่น "like" และ "uhm" และควรใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่สมบูรณ์เพื่อสื่อความหมายอย่างมีประสิทธิภาพ

例: I usually eat snacks in the evening because it's a relaxing time, and I prefer to eat them when my parents are not around.

提案: ควรใช้คำเชื่อมเพื่อทำให้ประโยคลื่นไหลและชัดเจนขึ้น รวมถึงหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่จำเป็น และเพิ่มรายละเอียดที่เฉพาะเจาะจงเกี่ยวกับวิธีการควบคุมการกินขนม

例: I think snacks are unhealthy; however, I try to control my portions because I really enjoy them. Therefore, I plan to reduce my snack intake in the future.

提案: ควรตอบอย่างชัดเจนและเป็นธรรมชาติ โดยหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่จำเป็นและใช้โครงสร้างประโยคที่ถูกต้อง รวมถึงให้รายละเอียดที่ชัดเจนและเชื่อมโยงกัน

例: Yes, I used to eat a lot of snacks throughout the day when I was young. For example, I often ate ice cream sundaes and various cookies like Oreos.

提案: ควรใช้คำศัพท์ที่เหมาะสมและหลีกเลี่ยงคำพูดที่ไม่จำเป็น รวมถึงจัดระเบียบประโยคให้ชัดเจนและมีความหมายครบถ้วน

例: Currently, I enjoy eating biscuits because they are very crispy, and I like the crunchy texture and good taste.

× I usually eat snacks during like come in the evening because it's a relaxing time and I can like, hide my parents from eating those next, Yeah.

✓ I usually eat snacks in the evening because it's a relaxing time and I can hide them from my parents eating those snacks, yeah.

The phrase 'come in the evening' is incorrect; 'come' should be removed. Also, 'hide my parents from eating those next' is unclear and likely incorrect; it should be 'hide them from my parents eating those snacks' or similar. The use of 'like' as filler should be minimized for clarity.

× I can like, hide my parents from eating those next, Yeah.

✓ I can hide them from my parents eating those snacks, yeah.

The pronoun 'my parents' is incorrectly used as the object of 'hide'; it should be 'them' referring to the snacks. Also, 'next' is likely a typo for 'snacks'.

× I think snacks are very unhealthy but I can help with controlling the proportion of eating them because I really like to eat it and I'm addicted to it.

✓ I think snacks are very unhealthy but I can help control the proportion of eating them because I really like to eat them and I'm addicted to them.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrectly used to refer to 'snacks' which is plural; it should be 'them' to agree in number.

× So. Uhm, I think I should reduce the snack intake in the future.

✓ So, I think I should reduce my snack intake in the future.

Adding 'my' before 'snack intake' clarifies possession. The sentence is otherwise correct in future tense usage.

× Yes, I was a fat kid and now I am so 2 UM, I used to eat like bunch of snacks like all along the day.

✓ Yes, I was a fat kid and now I am so 2 UM, I used to eat a bunch of snacks all day long.

The phrase 'like bunch of snacks' is missing the article 'a'. Also, 'all along the day' should be 'all day long' for correct idiomatic expression.

× I like to eat ice cream sundae Ann. Many kinds of snacks like Oreo. Res like that.

✓ I like to eat ice cream sundaes and many kinds of snacks like Oreos and the like.

'Ice cream sundae' should be plural 'sundaes' to match the context. 'Oreo. Res' is likely a typo and should be 'Oreos'. 'Like that' is better expressed as 'and the like'.

× For now, I like to eat like biscuits, snacks.

✓ For now, I like to eat biscuits and snacks.

The phrase 'like biscuits, snacks' is awkward; 'like' should be removed and 'and' used to connect the items.

× It's very crispy, so I like the taste in the crispiness of yeah, so that makes me feel enjoyable of this neck and it.

✓ They are very crispy, so I like the taste and crispiness, which makes me enjoy these snacks. They taste good.

'It's' should be 'They are' to agree with plural 'biscuits and snacks'. 'Feel enjoyable of this neck and it' is incorrect and unclear; it should be rephrased to express enjoyment of the snacks. 'Taste in the crispiness' is awkward; better to say 'taste and crispiness'.