Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks proper sentence structure. Please try to give a direct response with complete sentences and explain when you usually eat snacks using simple and clear English.

例: I usually eat snacks when I have free time or when I feel hungry between meals.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and has grammatical errors. Try to form complete sentences and explain your opinion clearly, using linking words to connect ideas.

例: I think eating snacks is not very healthy, but it can make me feel happy when I am hungry or upset.

提案: Your answer has tense inconsistency and lacks detail. Use past tense consistently and add more specific information to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young. I especially liked eating candy and cookies after school.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and unclear. Please provide a full sentence and specify the snacks you like clearly.

例: I like to eat fried potatoes and other salty snacks like chips.

× Are usually. Its neck when I'm free. Come or get hungry.

✓ I usually eat snacks when I'm free or when I get hungry.

The original sentence is fragmented and lacks a clear subject and verb structure. 'Are usually' is incomplete and 'Its neck' is incorrect and unclear. The corrected sentence provides a clear subject 'I' and verb 'eat' with proper conjunctions to connect ideas.

× I think. Is not healthy, but. It can make me feel happy. When? I get hungry or when I upset.

✓ I think it is not healthy, but it can make me feel happy when I get hungry or when I am upset.

The original sentences are fragmented and lack proper subject-verb agreement and sentence flow. 'Is not healthy' lacks a subject, and 'When?' is an incomplete question. The correction combines the ideas into a complete sentence with proper subjects and verbs.

× Yes I did, I will eat snack when I was young. And I like to eat candy too.

✓ Yes, I did. I ate snacks when I was young, and I liked to eat candy too.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'will eat' (future tense) when referring to past actions. The verbs should be in the past tense 'ate' and 'liked' to match the time frame 'when I was young.'

× I like to eat. Fried potato. Anne, Sophie.

✓ I like to eat fried potatoes.

The original sentence is fragmented and includes unclear words 'Anne, Sophie' which do not fit the context. The correction forms a complete sentence with proper noun and verb structure, and pluralizes 'potato' to 'potatoes' to indicate more than one.