Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，句子不完整，表达不够自然。建议注意句子结构，使用完整句子，并且避免重复表达。可以用连接词使回答更连贯。

例: I usually eat snacks every day, especially after 3:00 PM. Whenever I feel hungry, I find it hard to resist eating snacks, even though I know it might affect my appetite for dinner.

提案: 回答中存在语法和拼写错误，表达不够准确。建议使用正确的词汇和语法，表达观点时要清晰，并用连接词使句子更流畅。

例: I don't think eating snacks is a healthy habit because they often contain unhealthy oils and additives. Moreover, snacking can reduce our appetite for both lunch and dinner.

提案: 回答较为完整，但句子结构可以更自然，避免重复“often”，并注意动词搭配。建议使用更丰富的词汇和连接词。

例: Yes, I used to eat snacks frequently when I was a child. My grandmother would buy me many snacks after school as a reward for my achievements, and I often found it hard to resist eating them before dinner.

提案: 回答中句子断裂，表达不连贯，词汇使用不准确（如'sources'应为'sauce'）。建议使用完整句子，注意词汇拼写和句子连贯性。

例: I really enjoy eating chips because they are crispy and tasty. I especially like to eat them with tomato sauce, which makes the combination one of the most delicious snacks in the world.

× Eat snacks every day.

✓ I eat snacks every day.

句子缺少主语，完整句子需要主语和谓语，建议加上主语“I”。

× Is specially after 3:00 PM.

✓ It is especially after 3:00 PM.

“specially”应为“especially”，且句子缺少主语，需加上“It is”。

× Because every time I'm hungry, I can't control my serve not to eat snacks.

✓ Because every time I'm hungry, I can't control myself and avoid eating snacks.

“serve”用错，应为“myself”，且句子结构不完整，需调整为“can't control myself and avoid eating snacks”。

× Although I know it will influence my appetite for my dinner.

✓ Although I know it will affect my appetite for dinner.

“influence”通常用作动词，名词形式应为“effect”，此处用“affect”更合适；“my dinner”中“my”可省略。

× I don't think the eatings next is a healthy habit becauses next contain a lot of unhealthy oil and substances.

✓ I don't think eating snacks is a healthy habit because snacks contain a lot of unhealthy oil and substances.

“the eatings next”错误，应为“eating snacks”；“becauses”拼写错误，应为“because”；“next”应为“snacks”。

× Secondly, eating snacks may influence our appetite for both dinner and lunch.

✓ Secondly, eating snacks may affect our appetite for both lunch and dinner.

“influence”用作动词时通常指“影响”，但“affect”更常用于影响食欲；“dinner and lunch”顺序调整为“lunch and dinner”更自然。

× Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I often ate snacks when I was a kid.

句子时态正确，无需修改。

× My grandmother often bought me a lot of snacks after school as a reward for my progress, and I couldn't control myself to eat snacks before dinner.

✓ My grandmother often bought me a lot of snacks after school as a reward for my progress, and I couldn't control myself from eating snacks before dinner.

“control myself to eat”用法错误，应为“control myself from eating”。

× I really like eating chips because chips are really crispy.

✓ I really like eating chips because they are really crispy.

避免重复使用“chips”，用代词“they”代替更自然。

× I like the taste of chips.

✓ I like the taste of chips.

句子正确，无需修改。

× Also, I like to use tomato sources.

✓ Also, I like to use tomato sauce.

“sources”拼写错误，应为“sauce”。

× The chips with tomato sources.

✓ Chips with tomato sauce

句子不完整，缺少谓语，建议改为短语“Chips with tomato sauce”。

× Are the most delicious food all over the world.

✓ are the most delicious food in the world.

句子缺少主语，且“all over the world”应改为“in the world”更地道。