Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Keep your answer concise and natural, avoiding redundancy.

例: I usually eat snacks only on special occasions, like birthday parties, because I know eating snacks every day is not good for my health.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammar mistakes. Focus on giving a clear opinion first, then explain your reasons with specific details and linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I think eating snacks is not healthy if done daily because it can cause health problems. Therefore, I only eat snacks during special events like parties.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and correct grammar. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence, then add specific reasons or examples using linking words to support your answer.

例: Yes, I used to eat snacks regularly when I was young, but I stopped because it caused health problems. Now, I only eat snacks at special events like parties.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and contains unclear sentences. Try to give a clear topic sentence, then provide specific reasons or examples with linking words to make your answer more coherent and natural.

例: I like to eat cheese snacks because they are healthy and tasty. Many people enjoy cheese since it provides important nutrients, and I often eat cheese with eggs.

× No, it is every pupil like snacks.

✓ No, every pupil likes snacks.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'it is' and 'like' with 'every pupil'. 'Every pupil' is singular, so the verb should be 'likes' to agree in number. Also, 'it is' is unnecessary here.

× But I am journey like eating snacks on the merits event birthday party.

✓ But I enjoy eating snacks at special events like birthday parties.

The phrase 'I am journey like' is incorrect; 'enjoy' is the correct verb. 'On the merits event birthday party' is unclear; 'at special events like birthday parties' is the correct prepositional phrase.

× So I am not its next daily.

✓ So I do not eat them daily.

'Its' is incorrectly used; the correct pronoun referring to snacks is 'them'. Also, 'next daily' is incorrect; 'eat them daily' is appropriate.

× So doesn't access good for eating in some?

✓ So, isn't it good to eat them sometimes?

The original sentence is unclear and uses incorrect words. 'Doesn't access good' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'isn't it good'. 'Eating in some' should be 'eat them sometimes'.

× The every person like snacks, but it it is not good for health the summer injuries formative in his next really.

✓ Every person likes snacks, but it is not good for health, especially in summer.

'The every person' is incorrect; 'Every person' is correct. 'Like' should be 'likes' to agree with singular subject. The rest of the sentence is unclear and has been simplified for clarity.

× So journey I am it is next on the main event like party party Marris.

✓ So I usually eat them at main events like parties.

'Journey I am it is next' is incorrect; 'I usually eat them' is correct. 'Party party Marris' is unclear; 'parties' is appropriate.

× It is our fully harmful for it daily.

✓ It is really harmful to eat them daily.

'Our fully harmful for it daily' is incorrect. The correct phrase is 'really harmful to eat them daily'.

× Yes, when I am young I am meeting is next regularly but is not good for my health.

✓ Yes, when I was young, I ate snacks regularly but it was not good for my health.

The sentence refers to the past, so 'am' should be 'was' and 'meeting is next' is incorrect; 'ate snacks' is correct past tense.

× It is 'cause of St. and there's some other problems from the eating snacks.

✓ It is because of that, and there were some other problems from eating snacks.

'Cause of St.' is unclear; 'because of that' is correct. 'There's' should be 'there were' to match past tense. 'From the eating snacks' should be 'from eating snacks'.

× So I stop it snacks I am I was itraxx main function like party.

✓ So I stopped eating snacks except at main events like parties.

'Stop' should be past tense 'stopped'. 'I am I was itraxx main function' is unclear; corrected to 'except at main events'.

× There are many snacks but generally I like.

✓ There are many snacks, but generally I like cheese snacks.

The sentence is incomplete; adding 'cheese snacks' completes the thought. 'There are many snacks' is correct.

× It is good for health.

✓ They are good for health.

Referring to 'cheese snacks' (plural), so pronoun should be 'they' and verb 'are'.

× The cheese is very healthy.

✓ Cheese is very healthy.

'The cheese' is unnecessary unless referring to specific cheese; general statement uses 'Cheese'.

× Die every person like cheese because it is good for health.

✓ Every person likes cheese because it is good for health.

'Die' is incorrect; should be 'Every person likes'. Subject-verb agreement corrected.

× Soldier near him eating a cheese and eggs.

✓ I often eat cheese and eggs in my life.

Original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical; corrected to a clear statement about eating cheese and eggs.