Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi thiếu tự nhiên và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như câu "I would answer it that I. Would eat snacks regularly" không rõ ràng và bị ngắt quãng. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với một câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó giải thích thêm chi tiết một cách mạch lạc và sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý. Ngoài ra, tránh nói quá dài dòng hoặc bị ngắt quãng giữa chừng.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon. However, since I was diagnosed with high blood sugar two years ago, I have cut down on sugary snacks and now prefer healthier options.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn chưa hoàn chỉnh và có lỗi ngữ pháp, ví dụ như "Opting with. Fruits and nuts in various kind" không đúng cấu trúc. Bạn nên trả lời đầy đủ ý, sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh và liên kết các ý bằng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: I think snacks can be healthy if you choose them wisely. For example, eating fruits and nuts provides energy and nutrients, while sugary sweets should be limited to maintain good health.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu không rõ ràng, ví dụ như "I would have eaten snacks regularly if I've gotten an opportunity" và "so it tends to not healthy at all". Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi với câu chủ đề, sau đó giải thích thêm chi tiết bằng cách sử dụng các câu đơn giản, đúng ngữ pháp và liên kết các ý bằng liên từ.

例: When I was young, I often ate snacks, especially sugary and fried ones. Unfortunately, these snacks were not very healthy, which is why I try to avoid them now.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ không chính xác, ví dụ như "an ice creams" và "an old bar". Bạn nên sử dụng danh từ số ít hoặc số nhiều phù hợp và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng liên từ để kết nối các ý và tránh lặp từ quá nhiều.

例: The snacks I like depend on my mood. For instance, if I feel sad or lonely, I usually eat ice cream. But if I need energy for work, I prefer an energy bar.

× If you had asked that question two years ago, I would answer it that I.

✓ If you had asked that question two years ago, I would have answered it.

The sentence is a third conditional sentence referring to a past hypothetical situation, so the correct modal verb form is 'would have answered' instead of 'would answer'.

× Would eat snacks regularly, especially in the afternoon but after.

✓ I would eat snacks regularly, especially in the afternoon, but after.

The sentence fragment lacks a subject and is incomplete. Adding 'I' clarifies the subject. Also, the sentence should be connected properly to the previous clause.

× Diagnosing with high blood sugar, I tend to have a healthier diet.

✓ After being diagnosed with high blood sugar, I tend to have a healthier diet.

The phrase 'Diagnosing with' is incorrect; the correct passive form is 'After being diagnosed with'.

× No, I cut down on sugar now.

✓ No, I cut down on sugar now.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense; no correction needed.

× I believe that snacks are healthy for your body if you choose it wisely.

✓ I believe that snacks are healthy for your body if you choose them wisely.

The pronoun 'it' is incorrect because it refers to 'snacks' which is plural; the correct pronoun is 'them'.

× Opting with. Fruits and nuts in various kind and cut down on sugary sweets or dream can gain you more energy.

✓ Opting for fruits and nuts in various kinds and cutting down on sugary sweets or cream can give you more energy.

The correct preposition after 'opting' is 'for'. Also, 'kind' should be plural 'kinds'. 'Cut down' should be in gerund form 'cutting' to parallel 'opting'. 'Dream' is likely a typo for 'cream'. 'Gain' should be 'give' to express providing energy.

× Like I mentioned before from two years ago, I would have eaten snacks regularly if I've gotten an opportunity.

✓ Like I mentioned before, two years ago I would have eaten snacks regularly if I had gotten an opportunity.

The conditional clause requires past perfect 'had gotten' instead of present perfect 'I've gotten'. Also, sentence structure improved for clarity.

× Unfortunately, the kinds of snacks I've chosen. Always related to sugary or fried snacks like that, so it tends to not healthy at all.

✓ Unfortunately, the kinds of snacks I've chosen were always related to sugary or fried snacks like that, so they tend to be not healthy at all.

The verb should agree with plural subject 'kinds' so 'were' instead of 'is'. 'It' should be 'they' to refer to plural 'snacks'. 'Tends to not healthy' is incorrect; correct form is 'tend to be not healthy'.

× It kind of depends on the mood, the moods that I have for the day, such as if I'm feeling sad or lonely that I will eat an ice creams or if I want to have some energy for my work session that I would eat an old bar.

✓ It kind of depends on the mood, the moods that I have for the day, such as if I'm feeling sad or lonely I will eat ice cream, or if I want to have some energy for my work session I would eat an energy bar.

'An ice creams' is incorrect because 'ice cream' is uncountable and should not have 'an'. 'An old bar' is unclear; likely meant 'an energy bar'. Also, unnecessary 'that' removed for clarity.