Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Please try to make your answer clearer and more natural by using correct sentence structure and linking words. For example, say when exactly you eat snacks and why, and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: I usually eat snacks after school when I finish learning on my iPad because I feel hungry then.

提案: Try to organize your ideas clearly and use linking words to connect your thoughts. Also, use correct grammar and vocabulary to express your opinion about eating snacks and when it might be helpful.

例: I don't think eating snacks every day is healthy, but sometimes when I feel very tired and hungry, eating a snack helps me regain energy.

提案: Please improve your sentence structure and clarity. Explain clearly why you did not eat snacks often when you were young, using linking words and correct grammar.

例: No, I did not often eat snacks when I was young because my parents were worried that I might become overweight, so they did not allow me to eat many snacks.

提案: Try to give a clear and complete answer with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid incomplete sentences.

例: I like to eat chocolate because it gives me energy and makes me feel good, especially when I eat it with ice cream.

× Nowadays I eat next when after school and why I learn name on the iPad.

✓ Nowadays I eat snacks after school while I learn names on the iPad.

The original sentence has incorrect word order and unclear phrasing. 'Eat next when after school' is not grammatically correct. The corrected sentence places the time expression 'after school' correctly and clarifies the activity 'learn names on the iPad'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× No, I think it's not good idea if I eat about a snacks every day, but I think when I felt really tired and I've hungry, I think I want to show this next.

✓ No, I think it's not a good idea if I eat snacks every day, but I think when I feel really tired and I'm hungry, I want to eat snacks then.

The phrase 'a snacks' mixes singular and plural forms incorrectly. 'A' should be followed by a singular noun, so 'a snack' or just 'snacks' without 'a' is correct. Also, 'felt' should be 'feel' to match present tense, and 'I've hungry' should be 'I'm hungry'. The sentence is corrected to proper singular/plural usage and verb tense.

× No, because when? A young on my parents is not OK when I eat as snacks because.

✓ No, because when I was young, my parents did not allow me to eat snacks.

The original sentence misuses prepositions and has unclear phrasing. 'A young on my parents' is incorrect; it should be 'when I was young'. Also, 'is not OK when I eat as snacks' is unclear and corrected to 'did not allow me to eat snacks' to convey the intended meaning.

× They afraid. My overweight in.

✓ They were afraid I would become overweight.

The sentence lacks a verb and proper pronoun usage. 'They afraid' should be 'They were afraid'. 'My overweight in' is incorrect; it should express concern about becoming overweight, so 'I would become overweight' is appropriate.

× I think this is a not a good healthy.

✓ I think this is not healthy.

The phrase 'a not a good healthy' is grammatically incorrect. 'Healthy' is an adjective and does not need 'a' before it. The corrected sentence removes unnecessary articles and words for clarity.

× Absolutely, Sir. I like to eat about a. Chocolate because I feel that is when I eat an.

✓ Absolutely, Sir. I like to eat chocolate because I feel good when I eat it.

The phrase 'about a. Chocolate' is incorrect; 'chocolate' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. Also, 'that is when I eat an' is incomplete and unclear. The correction clarifies the meaning and fixes singular/plural and article usage.

× When ice trays with an I can eat chocolate.

✓ When I have ice trays, I can eat chocolate.

The original sentence is unclear and misuses pronouns and articles. 'With an' is incorrect here. The correction clarifies the meaning by properly placing the subject and verb.

× I have energy and. I feeling good.

✓ I have energy and I feel good.

'I feeling good' is incorrect; the verb 'feel' should be in the present tense 'feel' to agree with the subject 'I'. The correction fixes the verb form for grammatical correctness.