Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and lacks coherence. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear time frame and specify what snacks you eat. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and avoid redundancy.

例: I usually eat snacks twice a week, mostly on weekends. I prefer to eat potato chips because I enjoy their crunchy texture and salty flavour.

提案: Your answer has several grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to express your opinion clearly and support it with reasons. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid vague expressions.

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they often contain too much fat and sugar, which can lead to obesity. Therefore, I try to exercise regularly to stay fit.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains many errors. Focus on answering the question directly with clear reasons. Avoid irrelevant or unclear phrases and use linking words to organise your ideas.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I believed they helped me relieve stress, especially when I was studying hard to improve my academic performance.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains repetition and errors. Try to list your favourite snacks clearly and explain why you like them using appropriate vocabulary. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: I like to eat potato chips because of their crunchy texture and salty taste. I also enjoy chocolate because it is sweet and satisfying.

× It's nice for twice.

✓ I eat snacks twice a week.

The original sentence 'It's nice for twice.' is unclear and incorrectly uses quantifiers. The student likely means to say how often they eat snacks. The correct way is to specify the frequency clearly, such as 'I eat snacks twice a week.' This clarifies the quantity and timing.

× Once a week.

✓ Once a week.

This sentence fragment 'Once a week.' is acceptable as a short answer indicating frequency. No correction needed here.

× So I most prefer to eat the potato chips where I want to eat this next.

✓ So I prefer to eat potato chips when I want a snack next.

The original sentence is confusing and has incorrect structure. 'Most prefer' is awkward here; 'prefer' suffices. 'Where I want to eat this next' is unclear; it should express the time or occasion, e.g., 'when I want a snack next.' This correction improves clarity and grammatical structure.

× I don't think it's healthy for me too is nurse because there is too much net may cause the obesity.

✓ I don't think it's healthy for me either because there is too much fat which may cause obesity.

The phrase 'too is nurse' is incorrect and likely a mishearing or typo. 'Too' should be 'either' to agree with the negative 'don't think.' 'Net' is incorrect; the intended word is probably 'fat.' Also, 'may cause the obesity' should be 'may cause obesity' without 'the.' This correction fixes pronoun use and word choice.

× So I'm trying to practice myself to do most balls in order to keep fit.

✓ So I'm trying to motivate myself to do more exercise in order to keep fit.

'Practice myself to do most balls' is incorrect. 'Practice' is not reflexive here, and 'most balls' is unclear. The student likely means to encourage themselves to exercise more. 'Motivate myself to do more exercise' is a clearer and grammatically correct expression.

× Yes, I over ate snacks when I was young because I think eating stairs may help me to release the dress an it may need to escape the reality of practicing myself to get more higher academic performance.

✓ Yes, I overate snacks when I was young because I thought eating snacks helped me to relieve stress and escape reality while trying to improve my academic performance.

'Over ate' should be one word 'overate' in past tense. 'I think' should be past tense 'I thought' to match the past context. 'Eating stairs' is incorrect; likely 'eating snacks' is intended. 'Release the dress' should be 'relieve stress.' 'It may need to escape the reality' is unclear and corrected to 'escape reality.' 'Practicing myself to get more higher academic performance' is awkward; better as 'trying to improve my academic performance.' This correction addresses multiple tense and word choice errors.

× I have quite a lost last night to eat for example potato chips because I like the crunchy taste and the salty salty test study taste and also I like to eat chocolate because of his weight is tweets.

✓ I ate quite a lot last night, for example potato chips because I like the crunchy and salty taste, and I also like to eat chocolate because it is sweet.

'Quite a lost' should be 'quite a lot.' 'Last night to eat' is incorrect; 'I ate last night' is correct. 'Salty salty test study taste' is a jumble; corrected to 'salty taste.' 'His weight is tweets' is incorrect; likely 'it is sweet' is intended. This correction fixes quantifier use, verb tense, and word choice for clarity.