Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence, and provide specific details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and ensure your sentences are natural and coherent.

例: I usually eat snacks once a day, usually in the afternoon. This helps me relax and take a break from my schoolwork.

提案: Your answer has grammatical mistakes and is unclear. Make sure to express your opinion clearly, use linking words to connect ideas, and provide specific reasons or examples to support your answer.

例: In my opinion, eating too many junk foods is unhealthy because it can affect my sleep. Therefore, I try to limit how many snacks I eat each day.

提案: Your answer is difficult to understand due to unclear phrasing and grammar errors. Focus on directly answering the question with a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young because I enjoyed them. However, eating too many snacks caused me to gain weight, so I had to be careful later.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains irrelevant or unclear sentences. Try to clearly state your favorite snacks and explain why you like them, using linking words to make your answer coherent and natural.

例: I like to eat chips and chocolate eggs because they taste delicious. When I start eating them, it's hard to stop because they are so tasty.

× I opened each once a day to feel pleasure and relax.

✓ I open each once a day to feel pleasure and relax.

The verb 'opened' is in the past tense, but the sentence describes a habitual action in the present. The correct form is the base verb 'open' to indicate a regular activity.

× This can also help me to escape from my duties tracks.

✓ This can also help me to escape from my duties' tracks.

The phrase 'duties tracks' is incorrect. It should be possessive 'duties'' to show that the tracks belong to duties. Also, 'tracks' is unclear; possibly 'tasks' or 'duties' alone would be better.

× From my opinion, eating junk food can be an healthy and sometimes even affect your sleeping.

✓ In my opinion, eating junk food can be unhealthy and sometimes even affect your sleep.

The phrase 'From my opinion' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'In my opinion'. 'An healthy' is incorrect because 'healthy' starts with a consonant sound, so 'an' should be 'a'. Also, 'affect your sleeping' is better expressed as 'affect your sleep'.

× So I also need to limit my. Eating snags. In a day.

✓ So I also need to limit my eating of snacks in a day.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Combining the fragments into a complete sentence improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Definitely one I will send.

✓ Definitely, I will say yes.

The original sentence is unclear and seems to misuse pronouns and words. Assuming the intended meaning is affirmation, 'Definitely, I will say yes' is clearer.

× I enjoy eating snacks when I have time.

✓ I enjoyed eating snacks when I had time.

The question asks about past habits ('Did you often eat snacks when you were young?'), so the answer should be in the past tense to match the context.

× So I have had my teache an gain some weight when I was young so I need to lost weight when I become young.

✓ So I had gained some weight when I was young, so I needed to lose weight as I grew up.

The sentence has multiple errors: 'have had my teache an gain' is incorrect and unclear. The correct past perfect or simple past tense should be used. 'Lost' is the past tense of 'lose'. 'Become young' is incorrect; 'grew up' or 'became older' is appropriate.

× I prefer eating chips or chocolate eggs. Do you have a really delicious taste again? When you eat, you can eat repeatedly. Sorry just make me to stop one eat one once I eat.

✓ I prefer eating chips or chocolate eggs. They have a really delicious taste. When you start eating, you want to eat repeatedly. Sorry, I just can't stop eating once I start.

The original sentences are unclear and contain pronoun misuse and awkward phrasing. Clarifying the subject and correcting pronouns improves understanding.