Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. For example, say when you usually eat snacks and how that has changed compared to before.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, which is less frequent than when I was younger. Now, I prefer to eat snacks only when I feel hungry between meals.

提案: Your answer is short and has unclear parts. Provide a clear opinion with supporting reasons using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences and improve vocabulary accuracy.

例: I don't think eating snacks is healthy because they often contain too much sugar and unhealthy fats. Therefore, I try to limit my snack intake to stay healthy.

提案: Your answer is vague and contains filler words. Give a direct response with specific details and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: I used to eat snacks more often when I was young compared to now. For example, I would have snacks after school almost every day.

提案: Your answer is fragmented and unclear. Provide a clear list of your favorite snacks with descriptions or examples, using complete sentences and appropriate vocabulary.

例: I like to eat snacks such as fruits and sometimes drink Coca-Cola. For example, I enjoy eating apples and bananas as healthy snacks.

× Now I eat Fewer's next then when I was younger.

✓ Now I eat fewer snacks than when I was younger.

The word 'Fewer's' is incorrect; the correct quantifier for countable nouns like 'snacks' is 'fewer'. Also, 'next' is a typo and should be 'snacks'. The sentence compares quantities, so 'fewer' is appropriate instead of 'less'.

× And now I'm prefer to eat them only when.

✓ And now I prefer to eat them only sometimes.

The phrase 'I'm prefer' is incorrect because 'prefer' is a stative verb and should be used in the simple present tense, not with 'am'. Also, the sentence is incomplete; adding 'sometimes' clarifies the meaning.

× There are some.

✓ There are some snacks.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks a noun after 'some'. Adding 'snacks' completes the sentence and clarifies the meaning.

× From what I know, next have.

✓ From what I know, snacks have.

'Next' is a typo and should be 'snacks'. The plural noun 'snacks' is needed here to match the verb 'have'.

× Too much sugar.

✓ They have too much sugar.

The fragment 'Too much sugar.' lacks a subject. Adding 'They have' clarifies that snacks contain too much sugar.

× I cannot say offer, but sometimes yes.

✓ I cannot say often, but sometimes yes.

The word 'offer' is a typo and should be 'often' to indicate frequency. The rest of the sentence is acceptable.

× Surely more than now.

✓ Surely more than now.

This sentence fragment is acceptable as a comparative phrase in spoken English, but it would be better as 'Surely more than I do now.' for clarity.

× I like to eat. Next.

✓ I like to eat snacks.

'Next' is a typo and should be 'snacks'. The sentence is incomplete without the noun.

× Which tastes is.

✓ Which taste is.

The phrase is incomplete and ungrammatical. It should be 'Which taste is...' or better rephrased as 'Which tastes are...'. However, in context, it is better to say 'which tastes like...' or 'which are...'. The original is unclear.

× Are Coca-Cola or fruits?

✓ Are Coca-Cola or fruits?

This sentence is a question fragment and unclear. It would be better as 'Are they Coca-Cola or fruits?' or 'For example, Coca-Cola or fruits.' The original is incomplete.