Snacks— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly to the question with a clear topic sentence, for example, 'I usually eat snacks in the afternoon.' Avoid unnecessary words and ensure your sentence is grammatically correct.

例: I usually eat snacks in the afternoon, especially around 3 pm when I feel a bit hungry between meals.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but is somewhat unclear and incomplete. Try to give a clear opinion followed by a reason or example, using linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I don't think eating snacks is very healthy because they often contain a lot of sugar and fat. However, sometimes I crave them, especially when I'm tired or stressed.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear response with supporting details, and avoid unrelated or unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I often ate snacks when I was young, especially sweets like chocolate and biscuits. I think it was because I enjoyed the taste and it made me happy.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be more natural and concise. Use linking words to connect your ideas and avoid repetition.

例: I really enjoy eating chocolate and cakes because I have a sweet tooth. Sometimes, I also like other sweet snacks like cookies or pastries.

× Are you really would eat the snacks at the? Afternoon.

✓ Do you really eat snacks in the afternoon?

The original sentence incorrectly combines 'are' and 'would' which is not a proper modal verb construction. The question should use 'do' to form a simple present question about habitual action. Also, 'at the? Afternoon' is incorrect; it should be 'in the afternoon'.

× I don't think it is healthy for me to eat snacks, but sometimes I just really want to either.

✓ I don't think it is healthy for me to eat snacks, but sometimes I just really want to.

The word 'either' is incorrectly used here. 'Either' is used in negative contexts to mean 'also' or 'too', but the sentence already has 'but sometimes I just really want to', so 'either' is unnecessary and incorrect. Removing 'either' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× Yes, I did often eat them when I was young, so I a child I am a little bit fight.

✓ Yes, I often ate them when I was young, so as a child I was a little bit fat.

The phrase 'did often eat' is awkward; the simple past 'often ate' is more natural. The second part 'so I a child I am a little bit fight' is ungrammatical and unclear. It likely intends to say 'so as a child I was a little bit fat'. The verb tense is corrected to past tense 'was' to match the time frame, and 'fight' is corrected to 'fat' as the intended adjective.

× I really like to eat the chocolate and I like to eat some cake, something sweet, snacks.

✓ I really like to eat chocolate and I like to eat some cake, something sweet, as snacks.

The definite article 'the' before 'chocolate' is unnecessary when speaking generally about a type of food. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural. Also, adding 'as' before 'snacks' clarifies the meaning that these are types of snacks.