Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., "there isn't really winter"), and add one specific supporting detail such as typical temperatures or seasons. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: I live in Thailand, which is generally hot year-round. There isn't really a proper winter; temperatures usually range from about 25°C to 35°C. The hottest months are March to May, when it can feel quite humid.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons using linking words (because, so). Avoid repetition and correct phrasing like "too cold" or "too hot". Stay within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer warm weather rather than very cold or very hot conditions. I dislike very cold weather because it makes me feel uncomfortable and stiff, but I enjoy warmth because it lets me be outdoors easily.

提案: Be specific and use clearer reasons. Use linking words (because, and, moreover) correctly and avoid vague phrases like "get unclean." Give one concrete example of how wet weather affects you.

例: I definitely prefer dry weather because rainy conditions make me feel sweaty and my clothes get dirty quickly. Also, wet weather often makes public places muddier and I worry about catching a cold when I'm soaked.

提案: Start with a direct topic sentence, then provide a specific routine and one reason. Mention frequency and an example of when you check forecasts. Correct phrasing: "I don't usually check the forecast" and "when I travel abroad I do."

例: I don't usually check the weather forecast because I always carry an umbrella and prepare for different conditions. However, I check forecasts a few days before travelling abroad to plan what to pack and when to schedule activities.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and two specific effects with linking words (for example, because, therefore). Correct grammar ("affects", "carbon emissions are"). Avoid trailing off; finish the thought with a brief consequence or example.

例: I think global warming is the main driver of recent climate changes because carbon emissions are increasing. As a result, we see more extreme weather such as stronger storms and heatwaves, which harms agriculture and public health.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and add one specific reason and an example destination. Improve grammar ("winter countries" → "countries with winter"). Keep to 2–3 sentences and avoid repetition of "usually."

例: Yes, I like visiting places with cold winters because I enjoy snow and winter activities. For example, I often travel to Europe or North America to experience skiing and sightseeing in snowy towns.

× Actually Thailand is in the hot zone so during the year there's is not winter exactly.

✓ Actually Thailand is in the hot zone, so during the year there is not exactly a winter.

The phrase 'there's is' is ungrammatical duplication of the contraction 'there's' and the verb 'is'. Use 'there is' (or 'there's') once. Also word order of 'exactly' and 'winter' is awkward; place 'exactly' before 'a winter' and include the article 'a' because 'winter' is countable here when referring to a season instance. Suggestion: use 'there is not exactly a winter' or 'there isn't really a winter'.

× Actually I prefer hot weather but not too hot.

✓ Actually I prefer hot weather, but not too hot.

This sentence is grammatically acceptable; the correction only adds a comma for clarity. No tense change is needed. Note: keep present simple 'prefer' for general preferences.

× I hate cold because I feel uncomfortable when I'm getting too much cold, but for hot weather I prefer.

✓ I hate the cold because I feel uncomfortable when I get too cold, but I prefer hot weather.

'I'm getting' (present continuous) is inappropriate for a general statement about feelings; use simple present 'I get'. 'Too much cold' is unidiomatic; use 'too cold'. Also add the definite article 'the' before 'cold' when speaking about the concept. The final clause 'but for hot weather I prefer' has wrong word order; use 'I prefer hot weather'.

× Definitely I choose dry weather.

✓ I definitely choose dry weather.

Placement of 'definitely' is awkward; put the adverb before the verb to modify it. The sentence itself is acceptable otherwise. Use 'I definitely prefer dry weather' for a more natural expression.

× I hate when it is wet because I get unclean easily and I feel that what can carry more germs.

✓ I hate it when it is wet because I get dirty easily and I feel that it can carry more germs.

'I hate when it is wet' needs 'it' after 'hate' for natural English: 'I hate it when...'. 'Unclean' is not the usual adjective for a person in this context; use 'dirty'. The clause 'I feel that what can carry more germs' is ungrammatical; replace 'what' with 'it' to refer to wet conditions: 'I feel that it can carry more germs'.

× Moreover, you can easily get cold.

✓ Moreover, you can easily catch a cold.

'Get cold' means become cold (temperature-wise); in context the student means become ill. The correct idiom for becoming sick is 'catch a cold'. Keep modal 'can' for possibility.

× No, I don't usually check a weather forecast because I always carry an umbrella with me so no matter what is hot or rain I still have it.

✓ No, I don't usually check the weather forecast because I always carry an umbrella with me, so whether it is hot or raining I still have it.

Use 'the weather forecast' rather than 'a' when speaking generally about forecasts. The phrase 'no matter what is hot or rain' is ungrammatical; use 'whether it is hot or raining'. Use the gerund 'raining' to describe current weather condition.

× But I usually look for a weather forecast when I go abroad.

✓ But I usually check the weather forecast when I go abroad.

'Look for a weather forecast' implies searching for it; 'check the weather forecast' is the natural collocation meaning 'consult it'. Keep present simple 'usually check' for habitual action.

× I think global warming is the main issue that affect our climate because carbon emissions is now rising and it affects the environment.

✓ I think global warming is the main issue that affects our climate because carbon emissions are rising now and it affects the environment.

Subject-verb agreement errors: 'that affect' should be 'that affects' to agree with singular 'global warming'. 'Carbon emissions' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. Keep present simple 'are rising' for a current trend. The final clause 'it affects the environment' is fine referring to global warming.

× Yes, when I have free time, I usually take a vacation at winter countries.

✓ Yes, when I have free time, I usually take a vacation in countries with winter.

'At winter countries' is ungrammatical. Use 'in' for location and rephrase to 'countries with winter' or 'winter countries' is possible but uncommon. 'Take a vacation in countries with winter' fits the intended meaning. Alternatively 'vacation in winter countries' also works.

× I usually go to Europe and North America.

✓ I usually go to Europe and North America.

This sentence is already correct; 'to' is the appropriate preposition for destinations. No change necessary.

× I love to stay in winter.

✓ I love to spend time in winter.

'Stay in winter' is awkward; native speakers say 'spend time in winter' or 'enjoy winter'. Use 'spend time' to express enjoying the season. Keep infinitive 'to spend' or gerund 'spending' both acceptable.