Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more concise, accurate and grammatically correct. Start with a clear topic sentence stating the current weather, then add one specific detail about the seasonal change using correct tense and linking words. Avoid repetition and unnecessary words.

例: At the moment it's usually sunny and hot where I live. However, the climate is seasonal: after about six months we experience a cooler, winter-like period. For example, summers are dry and hot, while winters are milder and sometimes rainy.

提案: Give a clear preference and support it with specific and logical reasons. Use linking words such as 'because' or 'so' and correct vocabulary (e.g. 'foggy', 'humid', 'comfortable'). Avoid contradictory statements and unclear phrasing.

例: I prefer cold weather because I find it more comfortable and refreshing. For instance, foggy mornings are pleasant and I don't feel as exhausted as I do in hot, humid conditions.

提案: Clarify your preference—your answer is contradictory. Decide between dry or wet, then explain with specific reasons and an example. Keep sentences short and use linking words like 'however' or 'because'.

例: I prefer dry weather because I feel more comfortable and can go outside easily. However, I also enjoy the rainy season sometimes because it cools the air and creates a calm atmosphere.

提案: Answer directly with frequency and typical situations, using correct verb forms. Use adverbs of frequency (always, usually, sometimes) and give one or two specific examples of when you check forecasts.

例: I usually check the weather forecast before I leave home, especially if I'm planning a long trip or outdoor activity. For example, I check the app every morning when I need to know if it will rain later.

提案: Provide a structured answer: begin with a topic sentence about major effects, then give two or three specific examples with brief explanations. Use precise vocabulary (pollution, greenhouse gases, rising temperatures, extreme weather) and linking words like 'for example' and 'because'.

例: Climate change has caused more extreme weather and increased pollution in recent years. For example, rising temperatures lead to more heatwaves, and emissions from cars and factories increase air pollution, which causes health problems and more frequent smog.

提案: Answer clearly and give specific examples of the climates you want to visit and why. Use linking words to connect ideas and avoid repetitive phrases. Mention one or two countries or activities related to that climate.

例: Yes, I'd love to visit places with colder climates, such as northern Europe or Japan, to experience snow. For instance, I would like to try winter sports like skiing and see snowy landscapes, which are very different from the seasonal climate at home.

× Well where I live there is very sunny and hot weather.

✓ Well, where I live the weather is very sunny and hot.

The sentence had awkward word order for present simple description. Use subject 'the weather' + verb 'is' to form a correct present tense statement. Also add commas for clarity.

× Usually it change after six months as it is a seasonal.

✓ Usually it changes after six months because it is seasonal.

Third-person singular subject 'it' requires the verb 'change' to take the -s ending in present simple ('changes'). 'As' can be replaced by 'because' for clearer cause, and 'seasonal' works without 'a' here.

× During after six months it shows winter but now it is a summer.

✓ After six months it becomes winter, but now it is summer.

Use present simple 'becomes' for habitual or regular changes. 'Shows winter' is incorrect collocation; use 'becomes winter'. Do not use articles with seasons in general statements (no 'a' before summer). Remove 'during' which was redundant.

× Well, I am fond of winter because I like very foggy weather as there is almost we cannot see any moisture or humidity.

✓ Well, I am fond of winter because I like foggy weather when we can barely see due to moisture or humidity.

Original had awkward phrasing and incorrect word order. 'Very foggy' is acceptable but 'when we can barely see' is a clearer idiom. 'There is almost we cannot see any moisture' is ungrammatical; rephrase to express cause and effect.

× We can survive in cold weather but we cannot survive in hot weather.

✓ We can survive in cold weather, but we often find it difficult to survive in very hot weather.

Grammatically the original is acceptable, but adding 'often find it difficult' and 'very' clarifies degree. Modal verbs 'can' and 'cannot' are used correctly; this suggestion improves clarity rather than fixing a strict error.

× Well I prefer dry weather as I love rainy weather as there is almost very cold in a rainy weather so I prefer to rainy season.

✓ I prefer dry weather; during the rainy season it is often very cold, so I do not prefer the rainy season.

Original had multiple preposition and article errors: 'in a rainy weather' should be 'during the rainy season' or 'in rainy weather'. 'Prefer to rainy season' is incorrect; use 'prefer the rainy season' or better 'do not prefer the rainy season'. Reorganize sentence for clarity.

× Well, I checked whether only when it is in need or officially when I want to go somewhere.

✓ Well, I check the weather only when it is necessary or when I plan to go somewhere.

The sentence mixes past 'checked' with present context. The question asks about habit, so present simple 'I check' is appropriate. 'Whether' is wrong; use 'the weather'. 'In need' -> 'necessary'. 'Officially' is unclear and removed.

× I am checking almost whether if there is any rainy or not.

✓ I almost always check whether it will rain or not.

'I am checking' is continuous and awkward for habitual action; 'I almost always check' expresses frequency. 'Any rainy' is ungrammatical; use 'whether it will rain'.

× I usually check whether when I I want to go outside from my home.

✓ I usually check when I want to go outside from my home.

Remove duplicated 'I' and redundant 'whether'. 'Check when I want to go outside from my home' is clearer; however 'from my home' can be omitted: 'check when I want to go out'.

× There are lots of changes in climate as well.

✓ There have been many changes in the climate as well.

Use present perfect 'have been' to describe changes that have occurred over recent years up to now. Use 'many' with countable 'changes' and include 'the' before 'climate' for specificity.

× In past times there are very beautiful and hot climate, but nowadays there is very foggy and pollution climate we can see due to the cars and other electronic devices.

✓ In the past the climate was beautiful and hot, but nowadays it is very foggy and polluted because of cars and other machines.

Mix of past and present tenses caused errors. Use past simple 'was' for past state. 'Pollution climate' is incorrect; use 'polluted'. 'Electronic devices' is odd here; 'machines' or 'industries' fits better. Add articles correctly.

× Also industries cause lots of pressure or lots of damage to the climate.

✓ Also, industries cause a lot of damage to the climate.

'Lots of pressure' is incorrect collocation for climate; use 'a lot of damage'. Simplify phrasing and add comma after 'Also'.

× Well, yes, I am very fond of different type of climates.

✓ Well, yes, I am very fond of different types of climate.

Use plural 'types' with 'different' and 'climate' can be uncountable or singular when speaking generally. 'Different types of climate' is idiomatic.

× I want to see the different cities that they have different kinds of weather.

✓ I want to visit cities that have different kinds of weather.

Remove unnecessary 'they' and simplify structure. 'Visit' fits the context better than 'see' for traveling to cities.

× Like in our country almost season, seasonal as a season change after six months.

✓ In our country seasons change every six months.

Original is ungrammatical and wordy. Use simple present 'seasons change' for regular events and 'every six months' for frequency. Remove redundant words.

× But in foreign countries there is always one climate that is snowy, snowy weather.

✓ But in some foreign countries there is a consistently snowy climate.

Use 'some' to avoid overgeneralization. 'There is always one climate that is snowy' is awkward; 'a consistently snowy climate' is concise and grammatical.

× I want to see that weather.

✓ I want to experience that climate.

'See that weather' is awkward; use 'experience that climate' to express desire to live in or observe long-term weather conditions.