Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and direct answer first, then add specific details. Avoid redundancy and unclear phrases. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: The weather where I live is usually mild and pleasant. For example, it is not too hot in summer nor too cold in winter, which makes it very comfortable for me.

提案: Give a clear preference with reasons. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to explain your opinion clearly.

例: I prefer moderate weather because I do not like extreme cold or heat. For instance, cold weather makes me feel uncomfortable, so I enjoy mild temperatures more.

提案: Provide a clear answer with specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary and avoid repetition. Link your ideas logically.

例: I prefer wet weather because dry weather makes my skin and hands feel uncomfortable and dry. Therefore, I feel better when the air is moist.

提案: Focus on answering the question directly. Avoid unrelated information like insurance. Use linking words to organize your answer clearly.

例: Yes, I often check the weather forecast to stay updated. I usually check it every morning using weather apps, especially during spring when the weather changes frequently.

提案: Give a clear opinion with specific examples. Use correct grammar and vocabulary. Link your ideas logically to explain the effects of climate change.

例: Climate change has caused many problems recently. For example, temperatures have increased, leading to extreme weather events that disturb people's lives.

提案: Answer clearly and directly. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because I want to experience new environments and learn about different cultures.

× The place I live in is having wonderful weather.

✓ The place I live in has wonderful weather.

The verb 'have' is a stative verb and is not used in the present continuous form. Instead of 'is having', the simple present 'has' should be used to describe a current state or condition.

× I like this type of weathers and I feel comfortable.

✓ I like this type of weather and I feel comfortable.

The word 'weather' is an uncountable noun and does not have a plural form. Therefore, 'weathers' is incorrect; it should be 'weather'.

× I myself will be, uh, preferred, uh, normal weather rather than too hot, too hot or too cold because, uh, I myself have a, a little bad views from the cold weather and I like feel, uh, I feel like a.

✓ I myself would prefer normal weather rather than too hot or too cold because I have a little bad experience with cold weather and I feel uncomfortable.

The modal verb 'will be preferred' is incorrect here; 'would prefer' is the correct form to express preference. Also, 'bad views' is incorrect; 'bad experience' fits better. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I prefer a wet weather rather than having dry because uh for me like I feel discomfortable like uncomfortable for example my hands or skins or feet you can say it's get dry and damage my skin.

✓ I prefer wet weather rather than dry because, for me, I feel uncomfortable; for example, my hands, skin, or feet get dry and my skin gets damaged.

The article 'a' before 'wet weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable. Also, 'skins' should be 'skin' as it is uncountable. The sentence is corrected for article usage and pluralization.

× Uh, yes, I'm quite interesting in it.

✓ Uh, yes, I'm quite interested in it.

'Interesting' is an adjective describing something that causes interest, while 'interested' describes a person's feeling. Here, the student should use 'interested' to express their feeling.

× From time to time I check the weather forecast to stay update.

✓ From time to time I check the weather forecast to stay updated.

'Stay' should be followed by the past participle 'updated' to indicate maintaining a state. 'Stay update' is incorrect.

× I often check the MMM, check my insurance, uh, uh, details, uh, online to make sure everything is in order.

✓ I often check the MMM and my insurance details online to make sure everything is in order.

The sentence is fragmented and repetitive. Combining the actions with 'and' improves clarity and sentence structure.

× The climate has effect a lot of thing to change in recent area.

✓ The climate has affected a lot of things in recent years.

'Has effect' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'has affected'. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things', and 'recent area' is incorrect; 'recent years' is appropriate.

× Mostly the climate most of the time climbing has been changing very high ranks and people disturbed with the so much changing of different climates because they prefer.

✓ Mostly, the climate has been changing rapidly, and people are disturbed by the frequent changes in different climates because they prefer stability.

The sentence has tense and word choice errors. 'Climbing' is incorrect; 'changing rapidly' fits better. 'People disturbed' should be 'people are disturbed'. The sentence is rephrased for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, I do like because, uh, uh, I'm entrusted to see and find the different claimants from, uh, the place where I live and I want to change of climate and the changing in my life.

✓ Yes, I do because I am interested to see and find different climates from the place where I live, and I want a change of climate and changes in my life.

'Entrusted' is incorrect; 'interested' is appropriate. 'Claimants' is a mispronunciation of 'climates'. The sentence is corrected for word choice and pronoun use.

× So I'm love to you to see many places and people and climates.

✓ So I would love to see many places, people, and climates.

'I'm love to you to see' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I would love to see'. The sentence is corrected for verb form and pronoun usage.