Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答时有些重复（如“I I”），语言不够自然流畅。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更自然的表达方式。同时，回答稍显冗长，可以更简洁有效地表达观点。

例: I live in Shaanxi province, which is in central China. The weather here is usually sunny, especially hot and dry during summer. To stay cool, I often eat ice cream or visit cooler places during the summer holidays.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和重复（如“clothes, clothes”），表达不够自然。建议使用更准确的表达，避免重复，并且可以增加连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Honestly, I don't like either cold or hot weather, but if I have to choose, I prefer cold weather because in winter, I can wear more clothes to keep warm, whereas in summer, I can only rely on air conditioning.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不够流畅（如“if when I live in the in Shanghai”）。建议简化句子结构，使用更自然的表达，并注意语法准确性。

例: I prefer wet weather because it helps keep my skin healthy without needing skincare products. For example, when I lived in Shanghai, my skin was better than in Shaanxi.

提案: 时态使用不当（如“checked”应为“check”），句子结构重复且不够连贯。建议注意时态一致，避免重复，并使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every day, especially before going out. This helps me decide what to wear, making me feel more comfortable and confident.

提案: 回答中有语法错误（如“the driving cars”，“and and product”），表达不够准确。建议使用正确的词汇和语法，避免重复，并丰富内容细节。

例: I think climate change is partly caused by carbon dioxide emissions from cars. Therefore, the government should limit the number of cars on the road and promote the use of new energy vehicles.

提案: 回答中有地名拼写错误（“Chanxi”应为“Shaanxi”），句子结构简单且有些重复。建议注意拼写准确，使用连接词使句子更连贯，并丰富细节。

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates because I live in Shaanxi province, which is quite dry and hot, especially in summer. I prefer cooler places like Shanghai and Suzhou, as they would be more comfortable for me.

× I usually eat some ice creams or go to some cooler places to avoid the high temperature.

✓ I usually eat some ice cream or go to some cooler places to avoid the high temperature.

“Ice cream”是不可数名词，不能用复数形式“ice creams”。应使用单数形式表示一些冰淇淋。

× I will choose the cold weather because in winter we can add some clothes, clothes to keep warm,

✓ I will choose the cold weather because in winter we can add some clothes to keep warm,

“Clothes”已经是复数形式，重复使用“clothes”是多余的，应删除重复词。

× For example, if when I live in the in Shanghai I have a better skin condition than in Shaanxi.

✓ For example, when I lived in Shanghai, I had a better skin condition than in Shaanxi.

“If when”结构不正确，应去掉“if”；“live”应使用过去时“lived”以符合上下文；“the in Shanghai”中“the”多余，应删除。

× Yes, I checked weather forecast every day especially before I go out because I need to know the temperature outside so that I can add clothes or not.

✓ Yes, I check the weather forecast every day especially before I go out because I need to know the temperature outside so that I can add clothes or not.

描述习惯动作应使用一般现在时，“checked”改为“check”；“weather forecast”前应加定冠词“the”。

× For example, before I go out for play, I will check it and to and to decide what I will wear.

✓ For example, before I go out to play, I will check it and decide what I will wear.

“go out for play”应改为“go out to play”；“and to and to decide”重复且多余，应删除多余部分。

× It make me more comfortable and confident.

✓ It makes me more comfortable and confident.

主语“It”是第三人称单数，谓语动词应加-s，改为“makes”。

× So it is important for government to control the number of cars in the street and and product some new energy cars.

✓ So it is important for the government to control the number of cars on the street and produce some new energy cars.

“government”前应加定冠词“the”；“in the street”应改为“on the street”；“product”应为动词“produce”；“and and”重复，应删除多余的“and”。

× Yes, I would like to visit those cities because I live in Chanxi province, which is a little bit dry and hot, especially in summer.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit those cities because I live in Shaanxi province, which is a little bit dry and hot, especially in summer.

地名“Chanxi”应为“Shaanxi”，拼写错误。

× So I would like to go some cooler places like Shanghai and Suzhou.

✓ So I would like to go to some cooler places like Shanghai and Suzhou.

“go”后面表示去某地应加介词“to”，改为“go to some cooler places”。

× I think it will be more comfortable rather than in Shaanxi.

✓ I think it will be more comfortable than in Shaanxi.

比较结构中应使用“than”而非“rather than”，改为“more comfortable than”。