Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng rõ ràng nhưng cần cải thiện về ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt tự nhiên hơn. Bạn nên tránh lỗi lặp từ và sử dụng câu hoàn chỉnh, đồng thời sắp xếp ý rõ ràng hơn để câu trả lời mạch lạc.

例: The weather in my area is quite unpredictable. Generally, it is hot and sunny during summer and autumn, while spring and winter tend to be much rainier. Additionally, in the mountainous regions, it sometimes snows.

提案: Bạn đã trả lời trực tiếp và có ý kiến cá nhân, nhưng cần chú ý ngữ pháp và cách dùng từ cho chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, nên dùng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và tránh lỗi sai về số nhiều, số ít.

例: I prefer cold weather because it allows me to wear a variety of clothes like sweaters and hoodies. On the other hand, I often feel sweaty and uncomfortable during hot summers due to the high temperatures.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn còn nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, làm giảm tính tự nhiên và hiệu quả. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng phù hợp và cấu trúc câu rõ ràng hơn để truyền đạt ý tốt hơn.

例: I definitely prefer wet weather because it makes my skin look healthy and glowing. Also, dry weather can cause droughts and water shortages, which are serious problems.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có cấu trúc tốt. Tuy nhiên, bạn có thể sử dụng thêm một vài liên từ để câu văn mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ như 'habit'.

例: I usually don't check the weather forecast because the weather in Vietnam is quite unpredictable. Instead, I prefer to observe the sky to guess the weather. However, if I have important plans, I check the forecast once or twice to be better prepared.

提案: Bạn đã trình bày ý tưởng tốt nhưng có lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác, ví dụ như 'pupils livelihoods' và câu cuối chưa hoàn chỉnh. Bạn nên sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu hoàn chỉnh để tăng tính thuyết phục.

例: I believe climate change has caused many negative effects worldwide, including in Vietnam. For instance, it has increased extreme weather events like floods and droughts, which seriously affect agriculture and people's livelihoods. Moreover, the loss of biodiversity is a major concern because many species are endangered.

提案: Bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có lỗi chính tả ('comics' thay vì 'climates') và cấu trúc câu chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên chú ý chính tả và dùng câu hoàn chỉnh, đồng thời sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, definitely. As a travel enthusiast, I would love to visit countries with different climates because experiencing various weather conditions is both exciting and educational. For example, visiting a cold city while living in a warm place would help me learn how people adapt to different environments.

× While in my area the weather is unpredicted.

✓ In my area, the weather is unpredictable.

The preposition 'while' is incorrectly used here. 'While' is used to indicate contrast or time, but the sentence intends to state a fact about the weather in the area. Also, 'unpredicted' is not the correct adjective; 'unpredictable' is the correct form to describe weather that cannot be predicted.

× Moreover, in mountainous area is also half snow.

✓ Moreover, in the mountainous area, there is also some snow.

The phrase 'in mountainous area' lacks the definite article 'the' before 'mountainous area'. Also, the sentence is missing the verb 'is' after the subject, and 'half snow' is unclear; 'some snow' is more appropriate to express partial snow coverage.

× Well, my preference is cold weather because in these weathers I can wear a wide range of different clothes like sweater or hoodies.

✓ Well, my preference is cold weather because in these weathers I can wear a wide range of different clothes like sweaters or hoodies.

The word 'sweater' should be plural 'sweaters' to match the plural 'hoodies' and the context of multiple clothing items. This is a quantifier issue where the countable noun should be plural when referring to multiple items.

× However, in the summer I always feel sweat and uncomfortable because of high temperatures.

✓ However, in the summer I always feel sweaty and uncomfortable because of high temperatures.

The word 'sweat' is a noun or verb, but here an adjective is needed to describe the feeling. The correct adjective is 'sweaty'.

× Well it's definitely wet weather because in this kind of weather my skin can skinny and glowy.

✓ Well, it's definitely wet weather because in this kind of weather my skin can become skinny and glowy.

The verb 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb. 'Skinny' and 'glowy' are adjectives, but the sentence lacks a verb to link the subject and adjectives. Adding 'become' clarifies the meaning.

× Moreover, I much more prefer wet weather because the reason is in the dry weather is can drop in somewhere and a shortage of clean water.

✓ Moreover, I much prefer wet weather because in dry weather, water can evaporate and there is a shortage of clean water.

The original sentence has incorrect prepositions and awkward phrasing. 'Much more prefer' is incorrect; 'much prefer' is correct. 'Is can drop in somewhere' is ungrammatical; 'water can evaporate' is clearer. Also, 'the reason is' is unnecessary and disrupts sentence flow.

× For example, it has led to more extreme weather events like floods or droughts, which seriously affect agricultural and pupils livelihoods.

✓ For example, it has led to more extreme weather events like floods or droughts, which seriously affect agriculture and people's livelihoods.

The phrase 'agricultural and pupils livelihoods' is incorrect. 'Agricultural' is an adjective and needs a noun, so 'agriculture' is correct. 'Pupils' is incorrect in this context; 'people's' is appropriate to indicate livelihoods of people.

× Yes, definitely. As a traveling aficionado, I would love to visit other countries with different comics because experiencing various weather conditions can be very exciting and educational.

✓ Yes, definitely. As a traveling aficionado, I would love to visit other countries with different climates because experiencing various weather conditions can be very exciting and educational.

The word 'comics' is a typo or incorrect word choice. The correct word is 'climates' to refer to different weather conditions in various countries.

× For example, visiting a cold city when live in a warm place would allow me to learn how people adapt to different environments.

✓ For example, visiting a cold city when living in a warm place would allow me to learn how people adapt to different environments.

The phrase 'when live in a warm place' is missing the subject and verb form. 'Living' is the correct gerund form to indicate the condition of residing in a warm place.