Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 다소 중복되고 문장이 자연스럽지 않습니다. 문장 구조를 명확히 하고, 불필요한 반복을 줄이며, 문장 끝을 완성하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: The weather in Korea these days is extremely hot and humid because it is summer. Due to the high temperatures, people avoid outdoor activities during the hottest part of the day and stay hydrated to prevent illness. This kind of weather can be quite exhausting.

提案: 전반적으로 잘 답변했으나, 'effects'는 동사 'affects'로 수정해야 하며, 연결어를 조금 더 다양하게 사용하면 좋겠습니다.

例: I prefer hot weather because cold weather often affects my mood negatively. On the other hand, hot weather makes me feel energetic and lively, so I enjoy outdoor activities like walking or playing sports.

提案: 'bogus'는 부적절한 단어 선택이며, 문장 연결이 매끄럽지 않습니다. 적절한 어휘 사용과 자연스러운 연결어 사용을 연습하세요.

例: I prefer dry weather because carrying an umbrella on rainy days is inconvenient. Also, wet and humid weather makes me feel tired and less energetic. Therefore, I find dry weather more comfortable and enjoyable.

提案: 'take it in the morning'은 부적절한 표현입니다. 'check it in the morning'으로 수정하고, 문장 간 연결을 더 자연스럽게 하면 좋겠습니다.

例: I usually check the weather forecast every night before I go to bed to choose my outfit for the next day. This helps me prepare better and avoid being caught in the rain or cold. Sometimes, I also check it in the morning if the weather seems uncertain.

提案: 'People's Daily lives'에서 대문자 사용이 부적절하며, 'rising temperature'는 복수형 'temperatures'가 맞습니다. 문법과 대문자 사용에 주의하세요.

例: I think one of the main causes of climate change in recent years is environmental pollution, especially air pollution from factories and cars. Because of this, we have seen more extreme weather events like floods and heat waves, which affect people's daily lives. For example, rising temperatures have caused glaciers to melt faster.

提案: 문장이 다소 단순하고 반복적입니다. 이유를 더 구체적으로 설명하고, 문장 연결을 자연스럽게 하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I want to visit other cities with different climates from Seoul because it is currently very hot and humid here. This weather makes it difficult to enjoy outdoor activities, so I would like to experience a cooler and more comfortable environment.

× Weather Like where you live the weather in Korea these days is extremely hot and humid because it is the summer season Due to the high temperatures, we try to avoid outdoor activities during the hottest part of the day and make sure to stay hydrated to prevent getting I'll. This kind of weather can be quite exhausting but.

✓ The weather in Korea these days is extremely hot and humid because it is the summer season. Due to the high temperatures, we try to avoid outdoor activities during the hottest part of the day and make sure to stay hydrated to prevent getting ill. This kind of weather can be quite exhausting.

The original sentence lacks proper sentence boundaries and punctuation, causing confusion. 'Weather Like where you live' is misplaced and redundant. Also, 'I'll' is a typo for 'ill'. Correct sentence structure and punctuation improve clarity and readability.

× I prefer hot weather because I often feel unwell in cold weather, which effects my mood.

✓ I prefer hot weather because I often feel unwell in cold weather, which affects my mood.

The word 'effects' is a noun meaning 'results', but the correct verb here is 'affects', meaning 'influences'. Using the correct form improves grammatical accuracy.

× Some Also wet and humid weather makes me feel tired and less energetic.

✓ Also, wet and humid weather makes me feel tired and less energetic.

The word 'Some' is incorrectly used here and is unnecessary. Removing it clarifies the sentence and corrects the pronoun usage.

× Sometimes I also take it in the morning if the weather looks uncertain.

✓ Sometimes I also check it in the morning if the weather looks uncertain.

The verb 'take' is incorrectly used with 'it' referring to the weather forecast. The correct verb is 'check' when referring to looking at the weather forecast.

× Because of this, we have seen more extreme weather events like floods and heat waves, which affect People's Daily lives.

✓ Because of this, we have seen more extreme weather events like floods and heat waves, which affect people's daily lives.

'People's Daily lives' should be in lowercase as it is a common noun phrase, not a proper noun. Also, 'Daily' should be lowercase. Correct capitalization is important for proper grammar.

× For example, rising temperature have caused glaciers to melt faster.

✓ For example, rising temperatures have caused glaciers to melt faster.

'Temperature' should be plural 'temperatures' to agree with the plural verb 'have'. This corrects the singular/plural agreement.

× I want to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live now in Seoul, because in Seoul now it's so hot and humid that I cannot go outside for some activities.

✓ I want to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live now, in Seoul, because it is so hot and humid here that I cannot go outside for some activities.

The sentence is awkwardly structured with misplaced phrases. Reordering and adding commas improves clarity and flow.

× So I want to leave now.

✓ So, I want to leave now.

Adding a comma after 'So' improves the sentence structure and readability.