Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议加强句子结构的准确性和逻辑性，避免重复和不必要的词汇。可以尝试用更自然的表达方式描述天气情况。

例: I live in Hong Kong. In summer, the temperature usually ranges from 36 to 38 degrees Celsius, which is hotter than Taiwan. In winter, it can get quite cold, but the lowest temperature is usually around one degree Celsius.

提案: 回答中语法不够准确，句子结构不完整。建议使用完整的句子表达观点，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: I prefer cold weather because in summer I always sweat a lot, which makes me feel uncomfortable. Also, winter is very dry, so clothes dry quickly.

提案: 表达不清晰且语法错误较多，建议学习如何正确使用形容词和动词，避免重复和不连贯的表达。

例: I prefer dry weather because it helps clothes dry faster. Also, I don't feel uncomfortable or stressed in dry weather.

提案: 回答内容不完整且表达混乱，建议明确回答习惯和频率，并用正确的时态和句子结构表达原因。

例: When I was in secondary school, I often checked the weather forecast because I hoped there would be a rain warning so I could stay home from school.

提案: 回答较为清晰，但用词和句式较简单，建议使用更多连接词和具体描述，使表达更丰富和连贯。

例: I think the winter and summer seasons have become longer recently. Moreover, spring and autumn have become unpredictable, so I hardly notice the temperature changes during these seasons. It feels like it's either hot or cold.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，建议使用完整句子并清晰表达愿望和原因。

例: Yes, I would like to visit countries with different climates. For example, I want to go to Japan to experience snow and enjoy playing in it.

× I live in Hong Kong and in summer Hong Kong may be around 38 to 36 temperatures, which is Taiwan harder than it.

✓ I live in Hong Kong and in summer Hong Kong's temperature may be around 36 to 38 degrees, which is harder than Taiwan's.

这里“temperatures”应为单数形式“temperature”，因为指的是温度的范围，而不是多个温度值。同时“Taiwan”后应加所有格“Taiwan's”表示“台湾的”。

× which is Taiwan harder than it.

✓ which is harder than Taiwan.

比较结构中应为“harder than Taiwan”，不需要“it”，且“Taiwan”前不加“is”。

× Also in winter it is very cold but only the lowest is one time.

✓ Also in winter it is very cold but the lowest temperature happens only once.

“lowest”应具体指“lowest temperature”，且“one time”表达不准确，应改为“happens only once”表示最低温度只出现一次。

× I prefer winter is because in summer I always sweat and it makes me feel disgusting.

✓ I prefer winter because in summer I always sweat and it makes me feel disgusting.

句子中“winter is because”结构不正确，应去掉“is”使句子通顺。

× Also winter is very dry and it can help me to dry the clothes quickly.

✓ Also, winter is very dry and it helps me dry clothes quickly.

“help me to dry the clothes”中“to”可省略，且“help”后接动词原形更自然。

× I prefer dry weather because dry weather can boost the cold drying become faster.

✓ I prefer dry weather because it can help clothes dry faster in the cold.

“boost the cold drying become faster”表达不清，应改为“help clothes dry faster in the cold”更准确。

× Also I would not stress feel disgusting also.

✓ Also, I would not feel stressed or disgusted.

原句结构混乱，应调整为“would not feel stressed or disgusted”表达清楚。

× When I was secondary school, I always check the weather forecast because I always wished that if Hong Kong had a wet running warning, I could not go to school yet.

✓ When I was in secondary school, I always checked the weather forecast because I always wished that if Hong Kong had a rain warning, I could not go to school.

“was secondary school”应为“was in secondary school”；“always check”应为过去时“always checked”；“wet running warning”应为“rain warning”；“could not go to school yet”中“yet”不合适，应去掉。

× My wish?

✓ That was my wish.

“My wish?”不完整，应补充为完整句子“That was my wish.”。

× I think winter and summer periods become longer.

✓ I think the winter and summer periods have become longer.

“periods”复数正确，但时态应为现在完成时“have become”表示变化过程。

× Moreover, the spring and autumn become disruptive.

✓ Moreover, spring and autumn have become unpredictable.

“disruptive”用词不当，应改为“unpredictable”更符合气候变化语境。

× I cannot feel the temperature changing on the spring and autumn.

✓ I cannot feel the temperature changing in spring and autumn.

介词应为“in spring and autumn”，而非“on”。

× I have only felt hot and cold.

✓ I have only felt hot and cold temperatures.

“hot and cold”后应加名词“temperatures”使表达完整。

× Yes, I like it with different countries with different climate, for example, like Japan, I want to go to here because I want to experience the snowing and additionally I want to play the snow and try to.

✓ Yes, I like different countries with different climates. For example, I want to go to Japan because I want to experience snow and additionally I want to play in the snow and try it.

“like it with different countries”结构错误，应改为“I like different countries”；“different climate”应为复数“climates”；“go to here”应为“go to Japan”；“experience the snowing”应为“experience snow”；“play the snow”应为“play in the snow”；“try to”不完整，应补充为“try it”。