Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 문법적으로 부정확하고 문장이 명확하지 않습니다. 문장을 간결하고 자연스럽게 구성하며, 질문에 직접적으로 답하고 구체적인 예시를 추가하는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: The weather where I live is usually very hot, especially in the summer months like May. Because of the heat, people often stay indoors during the hottest parts of the day to stay cool.

提案: 전반적으로 답변이 잘 구성되어 있으나, 문장 연결이 조금 더 자연스러워질 수 있습니다. 연결어를 활용해 문장 간 논리적 흐름을 강화하세요.

例: I prefer cold weather because it feels more refreshing and comfortable. For instance, when the weather is cold, I can enjoy outdoor activities without feeling tired. On the other hand, hot and humid weather often makes me feel stressed and uncomfortable.

提案: 문법 오류와 어색한 표현이 많아 의사 전달이 어렵습니다. 간결하고 명확한 문장으로 답변을 구성하고, 구체적인 이유를 덧붙여 보세요.

例: I prefer dry weather because I can go outside without worrying about getting wet. Also, heavy rain makes me feel uncomfortable and I usually stay indoors, which limits my activities.

提案: 답변이 자연스럽고 구체적이며 논리적입니다. 다만, 문장 길이를 적절히 조절하여 더 간결하게 표현하는 연습을 하면 좋겠습니다.

例: Yes, I check the weather forecast every morning before leaving the house. I usually use my smartphone because it provides up-to-date information, which helps me decide if I need to bring an umbrella and prepare for the day.

提案: 답변이 불명확하고 문법적으로 부정확합니다. 질문에 직접 답하고 구체적인 예시를 들어 내용을 풍부하게 만드는 연습이 필요합니다.

例: I think climate change is caused by human development. For example, in my country, many new buildings and factories are constructed, which increases pollution and affects the environment.

提案: 문법과 어휘 사용에 오류가 많아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 문장을 명확하고 자연스럽게 구성하고, 구체적인 이유와 예시를 포함시키세요.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates from my hometown. For example, I want to experience very cold weather because I usually live in a warm place. It would be interesting to see how people live and enjoy activities in colder climates.

× I live in a place where the weather is usually very hot, especially during the summer months since it is May now, so making it quiet.

✓ I live in a place where the weather is usually very hot, especially during the summer months since it is May now, so it is quite quiet.

The phrase 'so making it quiet' is incorrect because 'making' is a verb in the -ing form used incorrectly here. The sentence needs a proper clause with a subject and verb, so 'so it is quite quiet' is correct.

× Because of these, people tend to stay indoors during the hot part of the day or go.

✓ Because of this, people tend to stay indoors during the hot part of the day or go outside.

The sentence is incomplete and unclear. 'Because of these' is vague and 'or go' lacks an object. Adding 'outside' clarifies the meaning and completes the sentence.

× For example, when I the weather is cold, I can enjoy outdoor activities without feeling tired.

✓ For example, when the weather is cold, I can enjoy outdoor activities without feeling tired.

The phrase 'when I the weather is cold' is ungrammatical. The subject 'I' is unnecessary here and should be removed for correct sentence structure.

× I prefer dry weather for to remain resource, but I find dry weather more comfortable because I go to outside without worrying about getting wet.

✓ I prefer dry weather to stay comfortable, and I find dry weather more comfortable because I go outside without worrying about getting wet.

The phrase 'for to remain resource' is incorrect; 'to stay comfortable' is more appropriate. Also, 'go to outside' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'go outside' without 'to'.

× Second, when it rains heavily, I usually feel inconvenient and prefer to stay indoors, which remains my activities.

✓ Second, when it rains heavily, I usually feel inconvenienced and prefer to stay indoors, which allows me to continue my activities.

The phrase 'feel inconvenient' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'inconvenienced'. Also, 'which remains my activities' is unclear and ungrammatical; 'which allows me to continue my activities' clarifies the meaning.

× I think one of the causes of climate changing is exactly development.

✓ I think one of the causes of climate change is exactly development.

The phrase 'climate changing' should be 'climate change' as a noun phrase. 'Changing' is a verb form and incorrect here.

× For example, in my country, although there are many apartments, they build a lot of place.

✓ For example, in my country, although there are many apartments, they build a lot of places.

The word 'place' should be plural 'places' to match 'a lot of'. Also, the sentence is somewhat unclear; 'places' is more appropriate here.

× Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have different climate from whether I live.

✓ Yes, I would like to visit other cities that have different climates from where I live.

The word 'climate' should be plural 'climates' to agree with 'other cities'. Also, 'whether' is incorrect; the correct word is 'where'.

× It would be interesting to see how people live in places with placing temperature and enjoying activities.

✓ It would be interesting to see how people live in places with varying temperatures and enjoy activities.

The phrase 'with placing temperature' is incorrect; 'with varying temperatures' is correct. Also, 'and enjoying activities' should be parallel and changed to 'and enjoy activities'.